Talk:Money (The Drums song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:02, 20 August 2023 (UTC)

I will start on this right away; one thing I can see from the get go is the lead's too short. --K. Peake 08:02, 20 August 2023 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Infobox and lead

• The recording year needs to be directly sourced in the body, as does the genre  Removed by Vaughan J.
• Audio sample should be in the body instead of infobox  Removed by Vaughan J.
• Change the first sentence to mentioning it is "from their second studio album, Portamento (2011)." and keep the lead single release later on  Partly done by Vaughan J.
• This lead should say it was the album's lead single in release part, also add comp/lyrics, critical reception, commercial and promotion that was done and TikTok appearance  Done by Vaughan J.
• You can keep the bonus track part in the new single sentence  Done by Vaughan J.

• Hey Kyle! I'm not the nominator, but I managed to fix the lead by a lot! Have a look and see if it's looking okay, and see if there are any changes. — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 07:09, 21 August 2023 (UTC)

• It is looking a lot better, though the second album part should be mentioned in the first sentence for a proper introduction and move commercial to being before TikTok. --K. Peake 20:45, 21 August 2023 (UTC)

•  Done and dusted. How does it look now? — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 06:32, 22 August 2023 (UTC)

Background and lyrics

• Quote box looks good, apart from Jonathan Pierce's full name should be used
• "The song was their second single" → "The song was the Drums' second single"
• Wikilink as synthesizers
• "in Pierce's apartment as well as" → "in Frontman Jonathan Pierce's apartment, as well as" and use Pierce only on the second occasion instead of here
• You need to add info about the comp too already using this that mentions guitar for starters; check more sources about song and album too
• "is mostly sincere."" → "is mostly sincere"." per MOS:QUOTE

Release and promotion

• Img looks good!
• "from their second" → "from the Drums' second"
• Pipe CD to Compact disc, however this release is not sourced at all
• Concurrently is not an appropriate term if these releases were around a month apart
• "the Lexington and XOYO" → "the Lexington, and XOYO"
• Mention that the last two performances were in 2011 too

Music video

• Remove overly obvious wikilink on Los Angeles
• "At the time the band were" → "At the time, the Drums were"
• Remove overly obvious wikilink on New York
• "with the lyric" → "with the line"

Reception

• Merge this and the below section, keeping this title
• "4 out of 5 stars saying it" → "four out of five stars, saying it" per MOS:NUM
• "and "Best Friend" from their" → "and "Best Friend" from the Drum's" and add the year of this album

Commercial performance

• Make this all one para and at the end of the above section
• Introduce the Mexico Ingles Airplay chart as being Billboard
• Mention for the resurgence that this included a growth in streams
• "The song was certified gold" → "It was certified gold" and mention this was in the United States

Track listing

• Good

Charts

• Good

Certifications

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Release history

• Various is not sourced nor is CD single at all

References

• Copyvio score looks good at 35.6%
• Cite Exclaim! as work/website instead on ref 2
• Ditto for Under the Radar on ref 3
• Cite iTunes Store on ref 9 instead, as publisher and with the wikilink
• Cite Digital Spy as publisher instead on ref 12
• Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead with the wikilink on ref 15
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 19 and cite Anti- as publisher instead

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; sorry it took two days for this. --K. Peake 20:45, 21 August 2023 (UTC)

• Pinging the nominator: @Sahaib since they haven't said anything yet. VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 10:21, 2 September 2023 (UTC)

@Vaughan J.: I have done most of the changes. Sahaib (talk) 11:37, 2 September 2023 (UTC)

• Pinging reviewer @Kyle Peake, so they can inform me of any changes that have not been done or should be done. Sahaib (talk) 20:42, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

• Sahaib I have been busy but still ready to come on whenever notified, some changes remain starting with the lead where direct quotes should not be used and the music video part should come after the critical reception. Also, merge the critical and commercial performances into one section and add the US as being where the song was certified gold by the RIAA. --K. Peake 07:48, 14 October 2023 (UTC)

• @Kyle Peake: Not the nominator, but letting you know that everything has been fixed. — VAUGHAN J. (TALK) 05:28, 24 October 2023 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, I copy edited the lead quickly but the rest was already fine! --K. Peake 08:17, 24 October 2023 (UTC)