Talk:MoneyBart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 comment! 01:35, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• "by putting her book smarts in statistics and probability into play" -That doesn't quite sound right (mainly the bolded parts). Try rewording it
  • Done.
• Don't start a sentence with "But". Try "However" instead
  • Can you point out where this is? I can't see it.
• Lead needs brief summary of ratings and critical reception. Also indicate its first broadcast was in United States.
  • Done.
• Indicate who Mike Scioscia is in plot section (i.e. coach of ___ team)
  • Done.
• I noticed other Simpsons GAs use the DVD audio commentaries. Are there any for this episode?
  • The season DVDs usually come eight years after the episode premieres, so not yet. :)
• 1st paragraph of production section should use "Casting" subheading
  • I tried doing this, but I think it would mix badly with what you mentioned about the writer of this episode.
• "child employee an animation cel" -What does bolded mean?
  • Done.
• "then placed in to a cart" -should be "into"
  • Done.
• Only to wikilink Seoul once in production section
  • Done.
• Wikilink storyboard
  • Done.
• First sentence of reception section is dangerously close to being a run-on. I'd say add more punctuation or split into two sentences.
  • Fixed.
• Websites are not italicized (i.e. MTV, ESPN, TV Fanatic, TV Squad etc)
  • Done.
• Add who wrote the episode in production section
  • Done.

I'm concerned that the production section only focuses on the opening sequence and not the rest of the episode. Making the episode is something the DVD audio commentaries would discuss.

As what I said above, the DVD commentary isn't out there yet, so I don't really know much else about the guest stars and opening sequence. I also can't find much else besides that in the news about the episode either, so that is all I could find about the episode.

I'll place the review on hold for seven days while my comments get addressed. Please reply here when you have finished, as I won't be watching the actual article for edits. Thanks and good luck, Ruby2010 comment! 02:09, 13 June 2011 (UTC)

I fixed everythng except what I mentioned above. Thanks, Guy546^(Talk) 21:13, 17 June 2011 (UTC)

I made a few ref tweaks for italics formatting etc. Your comment on the DVD release convinced me, so I will pass the article for GA status. Hopefully an enterprising editor will expand it accordingly once the audio commentaries are released. Very nice work, especially in finding such fantastic references. I wish more Wikipedia articles were as reliably sourced. Ruby2010 comment! 04:27, 18 June 2011 (UTC)

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