Talk:Miriam Weiner (genealogist)/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:16, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I will post my comments soon. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:16, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

• No dablinks, broken external links, copyvio issues
• Quite a few duplinks. Use this tool to detect them and link only on first mention.
• Sourcing - Looks decent, but citations need to be formatted well in places. Also, inline citations missing in quite a few places so the portions look unsourced.

Prose and coverage

• Lead needs to be expanded to include all major details of the article. Looking at the length of the article the lead should be two good paras long.
• Lead should not usually have citations unless we have controversial claims. The 2nd line in lead can have the citations therefore, but no need for the first one
• Edward and Helen Weiner Any idea about their background

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 19:07, 19 September 2024 (UTC)

• in Des Moines, Iowa Repeated occurrence in two lines (Early life)
• The caption should say "Weiner" for consistency

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

• only found in this online format. "found online" will suffice

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

• described as “The genealogist "T" should be small

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

• Weiner was responsible for changing the perception "Weiner changed the perception" is better

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

• in working in the archives there "on the archives"

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 19:07, 19 September 2024 (UTC) (changed to "time she spent working in the archives there")

• debunk the myth that existed at that time, an assumption that all Jewish documents were destroyed during the Holocaust Repetition of what was said at the start of the para. Try to rephrase the lines to include only one mention.
• In Donations of genealogical and archival material, before beginning the list mention what the list is of like "Listed below are the ..."

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

• Expand 'aka'

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 21:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)

• In Partnership agreements 2016 is repeated often. Try to avoid it by saying "the same year" or something

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 19:07, 19 September 2024 (UTC)

• Weiner's family comes from Ukraine, Belarus, and Moldova. Her surname, Weiner, was originally Vinokur. Belongs better in Early life. Actually I think it would be better if the section could be merged with Early life, the name can be 'Personal life'.

•  DoneEllieAC (talk) 19:07, 19 September 2024 (UTC)

Well-written and interesting :) Cheers, Sainsf (knock knock · am I there?) 08:05, 29 April 2020 (UTC)

Failing due to lack of response since a week. Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 16:26, 6 May 2020 (UTC)