Talk:Miniopterus tao/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sasata (talk) 17:57, 6 August 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! Ucucha 18:25, 6 August 2010 (UTC)

Comments:

• "In 1934, C.C. Young was the first to describe bats" why not tell us he's a Chinese palaeontologist for some more context. Also, did he describe bats, or bat fossils?
  • Done.
• "…the famous site of Zhoukoudian Locality 1." perhaps a few words to explain why its famous, and what this place is.
  • Done.
• redlink Bronisław Wołoszyn?
  • Probably not; the only papers I know of that he has written are the one that described this one and the one you cite below, and I don't know of anything else he has done that would make him notable. Kowalski and Li, on the other hand, are both important paleontologists who certainly deserve an article.
• "Miniopterus tao is a large member of the "schreibersii group",[2] but about as large as" why "but"?
  • Changed to "and".
• gloss coronoid process and condyloid process. Yes, they're linked, but the basis of this genus' existence seems to be based largely on the features of these processes, so they should be described in this article.
  • They're already effectively glossed; I added a little more.
• gracile -> slender?
  • Why not.
• "The preserved alveoli show that p2 was about as large as p3" why past tense here?
  • Because the p2 is no longer there, I think. But present tense works as well, and I changed it.
• link trapezoid, crown
  • Done.
• range map with a dot on it would be nice :)
  • Yes, will do.
• date range for Pleistocene
  • Yes.
• "and also contains Ia io and species of Rhinolophus and Myotis among bats" probably wouldn't hurt to include the common names of Ia io and Rhinolophus
  • I think it's unnecessary; we already say they are bats and the common names aren't going to add much.
• the title of the protolog implies that this bat is "long-winged", but the article doesn't mention this
  • "Long-winged bat" is a common name for the genus, but of course we don't know anything about the wings of this animal.
• anything useful from Wołoszyn, B.W. 1987 [1988]. Pliocene and Pleistocene Bats of Poland. Acta Palaeontologica Polonica, 6 32 (3-4): 207 325, pl. 11-12.
  • No; I looked at it. Wołoszyn probably found out about this species in the course of that study, but he doesn't say anything about M. tao in there that's not also covered in his other paper. Ucucha 18:25, 6 August 2010 (UTC)
• I'm assuming that this bat is extinct, but it doesn't say so explicitly in the article.
  • It already says it's a fossil species and that it is only recorded from a fossil site. Ucucha 18:25, 6 August 2010 (UTC)

Ok, good enough for GA. Passing now. Sasata (talk) 18:36, 6 August 2010 (UTC)