Talk:Military camouflage/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk · contribs) 00:52, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Good on you for taking on such a 'big' and important topic.

--- User:Thimbleweed was responsible for a major revision also.

I have the following comments:

What's the purpose of the quote from Churchill at the start of the 'Principles' section? It's not terribly informative, and seems an overstatement.

--- removed.

Some material isn't covered by citations

--- added refs.

"In some instances camouflage is dropped altogether, as in the latter part of the Second World War when the US Air Force dropped camouflage paint for combat aircraft to reduce drag and weight." - the US Air Force didn't exist at the time (it was still the USAAF), the paint was dropped only from some aircraft and as well as increasing speed the paint was removed to make the aircraft easier to see - the USAAF in Europe actually wanted the German air air force to see and attempt to attack its bomber formations so that the defending fighters could wear down the German fighter force.

--- now says "USAAF"; cold war added, with ref.

"Patterns are therefore generalized to work in several environments, [aiming for a general colour match or to disrupt outlines, ---removed this] rather than to mimic a specific terrain directly." - is this accurate? Many militaries have different sets of camoflauge for desert and forrested terrain.

--- removed offending portion (marked [... above]), clarified with desert, snow, urban mentioned.

A rewording may be what we are looking for here. According to Brayley (2009), most armies dealing with global operations use a desert camo, a woodland/jungle camo and a snowsuit. What was meant was that there rarely are camouflages specific for farmland, conifer forests, bamboo forests, broadleaf forest, mountains etc, the temperate scheme (like the US M81 or British DMP) covers the lot (Brayley 2009). Thus they are "generalized, as opposed to the "photo realistic" hunters camo. If this point does not come across, it needs rewriting. Thimbleweed (talk) 14:22, 26 January 2013 (UTC) --- I've rewritten it already, but we can say that DPM etc cover varieties of forest. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:10, 26 January 2013 (UTC) --- The basic point seems to have been lost in all the editing, and the points no longer reflect the sources. I have taken a stab at putting it back in order here. See if it can be used. Thimbleweed (talk) 22:58, 26 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The capabilities so developed were put to use not only in the western desert, but also in Europe as in the Operation Bodyguard deception for the Invasion of Normandy." - similar approaches were also used in the Pacific (see, for example, Battle of Goodenough Island#Aftermath)

--- done.

It might be worth noting that the Norwegian and Swedish navies continue to camouflage their small warships as they are designed to operate close to the shore

--- good idea, done, with image too.

The aircraft in the "Maritime patrol Catalina painted white to minimise visibility against the sky" photo doesn't appear to be white - there are several better options at http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Category:PBY_Catalina

--- Checked the images; this one is best exactly because it shows that whiter than white is needed, plane still partly appears dark against the sky. Caption clarified.

Nick-D (talk) 00:52, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

--- responses Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:50, 26 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Those responses address all my comments. However, I'd strongly suggest that File:Arw4.jpg be replaced with one of the many alternatives as I really don't believe it was created by the editor who uploaded it (it's an unusually small photo for something created in 2006, lacks metadata and depicts and elite military unit - take together, these are hallmarks of a false copyright claim). Something like File:Australian SOTG sniper team June 2010.jpg would be a good alternative if you're looking for an effective example of camouflage in action (disclaimer; I uploaded that image!; I'm sure that there are better alternatives). Nick-D (talk) 07:31, 27 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, will do that. Many thanks for doing the GA review! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:04, 27 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Assessment

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