Talk:Miguel Cabrera/GA2

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 07:56, 18 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 11:59, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Lede

Watch out for WP:SEAOFBLUE. We should avoid putting two links next to each other, such as professional baseball first baseman. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Why do we link third baseman twice? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
He claimed the 17th MLB Triple Crown in 2012, - to the uninicated this is a throwaway for something that looks really important. Perhaps explain what this is? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
In the Venezuelan Winter League, Cabrera was signed by Tigres de Aragua at 16 years old. - reorder this sentence to state his age first so we aren't talking about his career as a whole. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
professional in December 1999, at age 16 years 8 months - is his exact age important? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
There are six refs in the lede - can they not be cited in body instead? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

General

as an amateur free agent[8] and came up t - why does free agent need a dedicated ref? Surely that's obvious? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
You might want to link some American sports terms, like "farm team", "Class-A" and "All-star weekend", as the first two mean something radically different where I'm from. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Just because you've given an acronym in the lede and linked, doesn't mean you don't need to do it again in the body. Things like RBI, MLB, etc, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
In his first season Cabrera batted .268 (84-for-314), with 12 home runs, 62 RBIs, 39 runs, 21 doubles, and three triples in 87 games played and received NL Rookie of the Month honors for both July and September. - unsourced. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
With teammates Josh Willingham and Dan Uggla hitting behind and ahead of him respectively, Cabrera finished the year with a .339 batting average, 26 home runs, and 114 RBIs. He was selected for his third consecutive All-Star Game and won his second Silver Slugger Award. Cabrera battled the Pittsburgh Pirates' shortstop Freddy Sanchez for the National League batting crown until the last day of the regular season. Marlins manager Joe Girardi decided to bat Cabrera leadoff for the final game of the season to give him more chances to get a hit for the crown. He ended up finishing second to Sanchez. Cabrera also finished the 2006 campaign with a .568 slugging percentage and a .430 on-base percentage. - unsourced. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
On July 9, 2013, he hit his 350th career home run, against the Chicago White Sox. - unsourced. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
.[99][100][101][102] - WP:CITEKILL, remove one or try WP:BUNDLING. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Awards and highlights is uncited. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I'd say that section needs some words to explain what you are looking at Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 11:59, 22 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.