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GA Review

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Reviewer: Cocobb8 (talk · contribs) 16:00, 26 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This GA is undergoing further checks for Good Article Criteria following this discussion. I will be posting my progress here over the next few days. Cocobb8 (💬 talk • ✏️ contribs) 16:21, 27 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

'Microsoft Gaming announced that Activision Blizzard CEO Bobby Kotick will leave the company on December 29, 2023'

Yes, I have revised the sentence and stated that he announced his departure from the company with a source cited via Windows Central. Ryan York (talk) 22:28, 27 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This date has passed. Would the use of the term "would" instead of "will" be better here? "Will" implies that it has yet to happen, even though the next sentence says that "following his departure, ...". Thanks! Cocobb8 (💬 talk • ✏️ contribs) 22:34, 27 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done! Ryan York (talk) 22:37, 27 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Excellent, thank you! Cocobb8 (💬 talk • ✏️ contribs) 22:46, 27 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA review

Last updated: 16:03, 28 February 2024 (UTC) by Cocobb8

Estimated completion date: ~February 28

See what the criteria are and what they are not

1) Well-written

1a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct

1b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation

2) Verifiable with no original research

2a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline

2b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose)

2c) it contains no original research

2d) it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism

3) Broad in its coverage

3a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic

3b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style)

4) Neutral:

4) Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each

5) Stable:

5) Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute

6) Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio

6a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content

6b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions

Overall:

Comments:

The first few reads went very well, the article reads easily. I have encountered no major spelling or grammar errors and my autocorrect didn't either.

So far, the list of references is complete and has no errors. IABot didn't find anything either. Excellent use of in-line citations. Here are a few random spot-checks for references and verifiability:

Xbox Series X/S consoles sold 21 million units in total by 2023. Verified with the sourced website

Additionally, Microsoft Gaming sold Activision Blizzard's cloud gaming rights to Ubisoft for 15 years due to regulatory pressure from the acquisition of Activision Blizzard. Verified with the sourced website.

Microsoft Gaming laid off 1,900 staff (approximately 8% of its workforce) in January 2024. Verified with the sourced website.

Microsoft Gaming announced that Activision Blizzard CEO Bobby Kotick will leave the company on December 29, 2023. Statement not updated, though the source validates it. @Ryan York: would you like to change the sentence and source it with confirmation of his departure? Outcome: Citation kept, another one added, sentence wording changed. This concludes my spot-check of in-line citations. Close to every sentence in the article is sourced! There are no paragraphs that are unsourced, so there definitely isn't any original research. Earwig's copyvio detector didn't find anything, no copyvio.

The article addresses the main aspects, and properly summarizes key points.

Excellent use of neutral point of view.

The history of the article looks good, no edit wars, stability confirmed.

I checked all provided media, they all have the proper copyright tags. I fixed one caption, now all are written according to the guidelines.

This concludes my review of the article, and it is kept as Passed!