Jump to content

Talk:Michael O'Kane/GA1

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.


Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Nominator: Ergo Sum (talk · contribs) 21:46, 3 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: It is a wonderful world (talk · contribs) 11:01, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Looks like you are working through the College of the Holy Cross presidents!

Prose Magenta clockclock

[edit]

Lead

[edit]

There is quite a jump between the first and second paragraphs of the lead. I think it should fill in a little bit, perhaps with a mention that he continued studying theology, and became a teacher.

Early life

[edit]

"and he proceeded"

Jesuit formation

[edit]

College of the Holy Cross

[edit]

This left the college overcrowded. This required...: Lacks flow

This required O'Kane to turn away some prospective students, divide classes, and hold some classes at night. As a result, revenues increased, in January 1890, O'Kane revived plans begun under Edward D. Boone to construct a new building. By 1891, construction was underway.: I think punctuate in the following manner to avoid the comma splice: "This required O'Kane to turn away some prospective students, divide classes, and hold some sessions at night. As a result, revenues increased. In January 1890, O'Kane revived plans begun under Edward D. Boone to construct a new building, and by 1891, construction was underway."

Link "Edward A. McGurk"

Later years

[edit]

I think the information about O'Kane hall would fit better in the College of the Holy Cross section

which [put] the college in significant debt

Sources Magenta clockclock

[edit]

Health/formatting Magenta clockclock

[edit]

Last two Woodstock Letter sources need authors

Reliability checkY

[edit]

Mostly reliable books, with two citations to the College of the Holy Cross website.

Spot check checkY

[edit]

[1a]: checkY

[2]: checkY

[1b]: checkY

[3a]: checkY

[7b]: checkY

[12]: checkY

Scope checkY

[edit]

Doesn't seem to be missing anything

Copyvio checkY

[edit]

Neither Earwig nor my spot check found any too close paraphrases.

Stable checkY

[edit]

Media checkY

[edit]

Captions checkY

[edit]

Tags checkY

[edit]

Tagged appropriately

@It is a wonderful world: Thank you for your review. I've responded to each of your comments. Ergo Sum 15:03, 13 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.