Talk:Michael Larson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 23W (talk · contribs) 23:56, 6 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

I'll have this shortly; if not this weekend, then likely the next one. Thanks again for reviewing Off the Air (TV series). ₂₃W (talk · stalk) 23:56, 6 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Per MOS:NUMBERSIGN, use of the number sign (#) should be changed to "no."
- I think it's Done, but please feel free to fix any I may have missed.
Can "+ ONE SPIN" be typed as "and one spin"? It looks usual in the running text, and I'm not sure we'd stylize it according to the board anyways. Same with "PICK A CORNER".
- Done
"I really hope we don't have to play each other." Direct quotation needs a citation immediately following it, per WP:MINREF.
- Done
"You've probably got President Franklin D. Roosevelt in your pocket or purse right now, because his likeness is on the headside ..." I'm not sure this quote should end with an ellipsis. I think it can end with a period (following the last quotation mark).
- Done
with the answer being "a dime". ... Tomarken switched to a deck of "easier questions". ... leading Tomarken to wonder aloud if Larson "knew that the Whammy was coming." Need citations also.
- Added, Removed and Added
not airing any episodes of the first Home Player Sweepstakes the episodes landed in. ... and it was his final television appearance. References?
- Removed as sources would be rather difficult to locate, and the claims unnecessary.
deadly accurate "Deadly" here sounds like a word to watch; I'd rephrase. Same with into a frenzy and Fortunately for him.
- Fixed
Remove More recently, per WP:REALTIME.
- Done

Interesting article. I can tell you've mined most everything from the documentary; good work. If you can, though, I'd give it a copy edit or two. It's clear to follow, but some of the expressions seem out of place. I may have more to say later. ₂₃W (talk · stalk) 08:29, 13 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I think I've hit everything here, so I'll wait for a second run-through if necessary. Let me know if anything else needs to be fixed. Thanks for the review! --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 13:09, 13 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Won't be necessary; pass! Here's some book sources that may be nifty if you decide to take it to FA: [1] [2] [3] [4] [5]. ₂₃W (talk · stalk) 20:10, 13 September 2014‎ (UTC)[reply]