Talk:Michael Davitt/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 02:55, 26 January 2020 (UTC)

Review

Will review. Stay tuned! MX (✉ • ✎) 02:55, 26 January 2020 (UTC)

Concluding my review. Nice job with this article! See points below. MX (✉ • ✎) 20:09, 29 January 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

Several facts here are not mentioned in the body paragraphs and/or unsourced (like the predecessors and successors). Can you introduce them to the body sections so they are cited?

• I ended up taking this out of the infobox because he was not primarily known as a politician, and secondary sources barely discuss the elections.

Early years

• tenant farmers of little means, and spoke Irish as the family language. - Just a suggestion, but you can consider fixing the flow by adding “little means that spoke Irish as the family language”
  • Done, thanks
• He joined the Mechanics' Institute and continued to read and study - Is this institute the Burnley Mechanics? Consider linking that or Mechanics' Institutes.
  • Linked. Actually Haslingden Mechanics' Institute.
• Lancaster than in the rest of Britain - Does the source use Britain? You’ve used England in earlier mentions and just want to make sure we stick to what the sources say.
  • Source doesn't explicitly mention either, so changed to "than elsewhere".

Irish Republican Brotherhood

• approval of his parents and soon elected leader of the local Rossendale - How soon? You can copyedit to “was elected” or find a date for it.
  • Source does not give a date, just says that it was soon after he joined.
• approaches to achieving Irish republican goals - I would link Irish republicanism since this is the first mention in the body sections.
  • Done
• This collaboration was cemented by a meeting on 1 June 1879 in Dublin between Davitt - “during a meeting”?
  • Done
• This collaboration was cemented by a meeting on 1 June 1879 in Dublin between Davitt, Devoy, and Charles Stewart Parnell, leader of the Irish Parliamentary Party (IPP), which advocated Home Rule achieved via Parliament.[a] - Question here. Does the source in the footnote back up this sentence too? Or is the source there only for the footnote? Consider adding the source in the paragraph text too.
  • Done

The Land War

• meetings in Mayo to agitate for land reform. - Is that County Mayo?
  • Yes, in Ireland Mayo = County Mayo sort of like Oregon = State of Oregon.
• For the thirteen weeks that Davitt was in America - You’ve used the “United States” in previous mentions, I would stick to that here too instead of “America”
  • Done

Travels and marriage

• One of their sons, Robert Davitt, became a TD - Consider spelling TD out since I can assure you most readers do not know what it is.
  • Well, the spelled out version is "teachta dála" which is not very accessible either. I added (national legislator) for clarification.

Final years and death

• procession of almost a mile followed the coffin - Add a convert template to include kilometers too.
  • Done

Thanks for the review! I think I've addressed everything. buidhe 00:40, 3 February 2020 (UTC)