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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 18:28, 21 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]


I'll have a look. My first comments should be up within a few days. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 18:28, 21 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Beginning with the infobox and lead.

Infobox

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Lead

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  • I'm not sure "Memorial a las víctimas de violencia en México" should be italicized in the opening sentence
  • The second paragraph seems a bit short. Either expand this or merge it with the third one.
  • I split the first paragraph and merged it with the second as it imitates the article's structure.

More to follow in the future. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 04:40, 25 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Background and history

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  • Take "(militarily known as collateral damage)" out of parantheses, and maybe use in collateral damage
  • No need to link commonly recognized forms of currency per WP:OVERLINK
  • Something seems to be wrong with the Ness Magazine link, making it harder to verify the text attributed to this
  • I might've missed something but can't find either 7 September or 23 November 2012 mentioned here

After you address these, I'll get into "Description and meaning". SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 03:34, 3 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Description and meaning

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  • Too many sentences start with "the"; it feels particularly monotonous with the second paragraph where only its last one starts with anything else
  • Per WP:REPCITE, you only need to use the same citation once in a row within a paragraph, so you can remove ref#12 from the end of "paths and benches" as well as ref#13 from the end of "the graffiti of the Berlin Wall" and ref#7 from the end of "Cicero, Mahatma Gandhi, Martin Luther King Jr. and Carlos Fuentes"
  • I'd elaborate on how the use of 7 for 70 is to represent/sybmolize perfection and maybe some of the 10 multiplication; don't simply assume all readers will be familiar with this concept

My next batch of comments will most likely be the last. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 03:04, 8 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed (I guess) / removed (one of them was for the DYK) / expanded (CC) Tbhotch™ 21:14, 9 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good, and I made one minor adjustment here. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 03:00, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. 03:48, 18 March 2022 (UTC)

Reception

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  • More instances of WP:REPCITE; you only need to use ref#8 at the end of "an unspoken language of healing", and ref#20 at the end of "memorial only has value to the extent that it has meaning"
  • Done
  • "For Elizabeth Donoff from Architect Magazine lights deliver" seems like it's missing a comma right before "lights"
  • Done
  • Is it advisable to link Miquel Adrià here before having an article on the English Wikipedia? The Spanish version might be enough for now unless you have a specific reason for implementing it in this case.
  • The links are automatically given by the template {{ill}}. I think they are added to encourage their creation.
I requested an RM on that page. (CC) Tbhotch™ 04:09, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • I see mentions of "facade" and "government", but not the exact words of "governmental façade" here or "fachada gubernamental", contrary to what your current use of the quotation marks suggest
  • I have removed the quotations and reworded the phrase.
  • How is "Patricia Prado of Fundación Camino a Casa and Alejandro Martí of México SOS were present during the inauguration" relevant here? It says nothing about their opinions on this memorial.

See also

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  • Nothing of concern

Notes

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  • Flawless!

References

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  • I'm not convinced "vLex", "Aristegui Noticias", "Animal Político", or Informador.mx should have italics
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  • Both entries are fine to include

Overall

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  • Prose: Almost there, but needs tweaking
  • Referencing: One or two verification issues, and a few citations should have their formatting adjusted
  • Coverage: Mostly good, I just have doubts on the final sentence used unless it gets reworked to show stances (which would be more beneficial to write about)
  • Neutrality: No bias found
  • Stability: Looks good
  • Media: The one image used is perfectly fine
  • Verdict Starting now, this nomination is being placed on hold for seven days, which I'm sure will be enough time for you to address my remaining comments. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 03:00, 18 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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