Talk:Mel Charles/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk · contribs) 00:44, 5 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found.

Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 00:45, 5 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
The article is not reasonably well written. Examples include:

John and Mel Charles seemed destined to begin their careers at local club Swansea Town. "seemed destined" is a weasel phrase. As is " the unforgiving waters " and "This proved costly to Swansea,"

the other in front of 50,000 rank-soaked Welshmen - "rank-soaked"?

This needs copy-editing to improve prose flow and narrative.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
All but two of the citations are to a primary source, Charles' autobiography. More secondary sources are needed.

What makes {http://www.rsssf.com/miscellaneous/wal-recintlp.html} and {http://www.neilbrown.newcastlefans.com/player/melcharles.htm} reliable sources?
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
The Swansea City section contains a lot of extraneous material, does not focus on Charles.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Reads somewhat like a fan article.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
stable
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
No images used.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
This article does not meet the good article criteria at present, get it copy-edited, take to peer review, then consider renomination. Jezhotwells (talk) 01:46, 5 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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