Talk:Medieval stained glass in Sweden/GA1
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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 04:05, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
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Prose
[edit]15th and 16th century
centuries
Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
with stained glass during the entire Middle Ages
Replace "during the entire" with "throughout".
- Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
survived until today
Delete "until today".
- Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
did stained glass paintings
paintings? Did you mean "windows"?
- Fixed Yes. Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
Andersson acknowledges the notnames of Roosval but uses them only sparingly; he also highlights the difficulties in determining the artistic influences different workshops may have had on each other, whether some works came from different workshops or from different artists within the same workshop, problems concerning determining a chronology between them and even whether it is possible to determine if there ever were any artistically independent glass workshops established on Gotland at all during the Middle Ages, especially given the lack of written sources.
This is easily the longest sentence I have ever read on Wikipedia.
- Fixed Lol. I split it up. Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
problems concerning determining
Remove "concerning"; it makes the sentence read weird and "determining", which is better for the job at hand, redundant.
Removed Yakikaki (talk) 14:28, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
survive to this day in Sweden
Axe "to this day".
- Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
"Circa" is for dates. Both times it is used in the article is for the measurement of space; "about" would be better.
- Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
the chapel at Ulriksdal Palace contains some medieval stained glass window panes of Swiss origin, bought by Charles XV of Sweden and subsequently installed in the chapel.
Condense.
- Fixed I hope this works better? Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
It has been assumed that the windows surviving in these countryside churches were made by workshops operating in or mainly for Visby; however, all the medieval churches of Visby are today in ruins, with the exception of Visby Cathedral.
Another long sentence.
- Fixed Changed it all a bit. Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
preserved in situ in Sweden
Un-italicize "in situ".
- Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
The Byzantine influence, as seen e.g. in the representation of Christ Pantocrator,
Seen where? At Dalhem?
- Fixed Yes. Clarified. Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
During the first half of the 14th century, a number of stylistically differentiated but clearly Gothic works survive on Gotland.
Reword.
- Fixed That was incomprehensible even to me. Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
is that of Lye Church
Link.
- Fixed Yakikaki (talk) 11:52, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
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