Talk:McDonald's Treasure Land Adventure/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TarkusAB (talk · contribs) 15:03, 16 January 2021 (UTC)

Gameplay

• The passage "The player controls Ronald...." and everything after that in the first paragraph should probably be the top of the second paragraph instead.
  • Done. You're right, it does look better that way.
• Wikilink gaming terms like health, boss, power-ups, etc.
  • Somehow I always forget to do that. Done.

Development

• "Koichi Kimura served as the game's designer, with Maegawa assisting as programmer and Katsuhiko Suzuki composing the soundtrack." I don't think this portrays an accurate view of the management structure behind the game. It suggests but omits the fact that Kimura was the director (per credits), and omits that Maegawa was the producer (again per credits). The passage as written suggests that Maegawa was working under orders of Kimura which I'm not sure was entirely true.
  • The Shmuplations interview credited Kimura as being the game's designer (or at least the head designer), and Maegawa as programmer. I did look at the credits listing on Sega Retro, and sure enough it also places Maegawa as producer and Kimura director. So I'm not sure if the Shmuplations interview was only listing one role for the sake of brevity or for whatever reason messed up the credits. I didn't want to add in information that wasn't cited by the source so I initially left it like that, though I've since fixed it.
• "The team wanted the game's newer characters to feel in place with the McDonaldland setting, with multiple ideas for enemies and other characters being rejected for not fulfilling this." This is the first time you're mentioning that Treasure created original non-McDonaldland characters, so maybe write that out first. Maybe rewrite to something like: "The team needed to design original enemies and characters apart from the ones in the McDonaldland franchise. They abandoned many of their ideas for not fitting the feel of McDonaldland."
  • Done.

Reception

• Fine

Lead

• Fine

See Also

• Maybe this is just me, but I'm not a fan of using See Also to list similar games. It feels like, "here are some related games that editors were too lazy to properly incorporate into the article" If a source mentions these games in a way that's worth mentioning in the article, then add that, but otherwise, the other McDonald's games can be found in the McD template at the bottom.
  • This was something I forgot to remove before I nominated this (I suppose that's what happens when you pull an all-nighter on an article).

TarkusAB^talk/contrib 16:26, 16 January 2021 (UTC)

• TarkusAB: Concerns addressed. Namcokid47 ^(Contribs) 17:42, 16 January 2021 (UTC)

@Namcokid47: Pass. Re: staff roles: Shmuplations didn't screw up, the Beep! article leads with a list of staff and does credit Kimura as "designer" (i.e. artist). My concern was more the choice of the word "assisted" to describe Maegawa's contributions. Even though Kimura was the director, I wouldn't call Maegawa's dual role as producer / lead programmer an "assisting" role. It's possible he shared some of the gameplay design responsibilities with Kimura. No one was credited as a "planner" in the game credits (i.e. game designer), and Maegawa has gone on record saying Treasure staff share game design responsibilities. But that is more FAC level semantics and should not get in the way of a GA. TarkusAB^talk/contrib 18:51, 16 January 2021 (UTC)