Talk:Mayfly/GA1

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 21:35, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll review this soon. FunkMonk (talk) 21:35, 8 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]
There are quite a few unfamiliar terms under description that could need a little explanation in parenthesis.

Done some glossing and copyediting. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:08, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Dolania americana has the shortest lifespan of any mayfly: the adult females of the species live for less than five minutes." Which has the longest?

Neither the serious sources nor the abundant trivia-celebrators seem to have recorded this particular fact; we mention that adults of some species can last longer than a day. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:15, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

There are other unfamiliar terms outside description as well, such as "nuptial".

Glossed 'nuptial' and copyedited for readability. Chiswick Chap (talk) 11:48, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

May just be me who find it a bit odd, but the image captioned "Male subimago of Baetis tricaudatus" has an animal in a forest of human body hair, which does not seem like a natural environment...

Replaced. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:28, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

There are some cases of overlinking throughout.

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:28, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Why no distribution/habitat section?

Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:26, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

No explanation for the English common name(s)?

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:08, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Some of the old PD images state they are "own work", but this surely can't be the case? The original artists should be credited in the author fields, and the licenses should be changed to PD. Digital manipulation of PD images is still derivative work, and does not create new copyright.

Fixed author, date, PD for Dürer image. Chiswick Chap (talk) 11:39, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The very long etymology in the intro may fit better under taxonomy.

Moved. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:10, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"The character Kes in the science fiction series Star Trek: Voyager is described as an alien mayfly.[40]" This is so trivial as to be irrelevant, I'd say.

Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:47, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"and covering cars and buildings with a "slimy mess"." What slime? This is not mentioned in the biology sections.

The source uses the words "slimy mess" and is more specifically referring (I guess) to squashed corpses on roads and sidewalks. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:47, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"and exhibit a number of ancestral traits that were probably present in the first flying insects, such as long tails and wings that do not fold flat over the abdomen." Not mentioned in article., only intro.

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:47, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"Over 3,000 species in 42 families and over 400 genera are known worldwide,[3] including about 630 species in North America.[4]" Only mentioned in intro.

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:47, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking on this review. Chiswick Chap (who is away) nominated it, so I did not get a notification that it was under review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 04:57, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Oops! I'm back, and have brought the article up to date as indicated above. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:27, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Some last things:
Now the intro seems a bit short, should be a summary of the article.

Extended the lead somewhat, mainly by adding a paragraph on humans and mayflies. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:14, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Any explanation for the name "shadfly"?

Flies when the shad runs. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:04, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The image of fishing flies[1] needs "proper" author info.

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:57, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, looks good, will pass. FunkMonk (talk) 16:19, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:30, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Indeed, many thanks. You found some things we should have done before we nominated the article for GA. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:38, 10 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]