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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:35, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
Looks interesting. I'll have this finished soon. JAGUAR 21:35, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "and Adi Granov was responsible for X's new design" - this is the first mention of X, and for readers unfamiliar with Mega Man lore (especially me), it might be best to mention that he is the protagonist here. I realize that it's mentioned in the sentence after, but I think it would be less confusing to mention it in this sentence. Also, X should be linked here and not in the sentence after
- "The redesign for the Mega Man character was to be done" - link Mega Man (character)
- "Instead of his arm transforming into a cannon, his armour transforms to create a gun" - armor? I'm not picky, just checking that one spelling variation is used consistently
- "The game also was planned to have branching paths" - The game was also
- "It was going to build upon the mythology and feature characters" - best to start the paragraph with Maverick Hunter was going to build upon
- "They compared the direction to that of Metroid Prime by developer Retro Studios (from which Armature Studio spun out)" - 'spun out'(?) sounds informal
- "He compared it to Metroid Prime's design by noting that the art style didn't change much" - did not
- The reception section could do with splitting into two paragraphs
- No dead links
- No dab links
Sorry for the delay in reviewing this. It was an interesting read. Once all of the above have been clarified then this should be good to go. JAGUAR 17:38, 7 April 2016 (UTC)
- @GamerPro64: I noticed the bot didn't leave you a notification. JAGUAR 12:12, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
Done everything. GamerPro64 00:16, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing them. I've checked the article and this looks like it's good to go JAGUAR 18:58, 9 April 2016 (UTC)