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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


This is something new to me and a truly interesting topic. Will snatch this! Sainsf <^>Talk all words 04:26, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for taking this on.

Lead

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  • "Buildings" is linked twice. Do we really need a link for this? Even if this is an architecture-related article?
Removed one.
  • " Islamic architecture" is also linked twice
Done.
  • One may not understand spatial forms at once.
Tweaked wording; not really avoidable in architecture.
  • from the Pythagoreans onwards How long ago would that be?
Done.
  • You may link "mausoleum", "hyperbolic"
Done.
  • conveying a message about Hindu cosmology Leaves the reader wondering what the message would be. Could you add a word or two on that? Else remove it and mention it only in the main text.
Done; the word is already in the main text.
  • What does "secular" convey here? In whose opinion are they so?
Removed.
  • I wonder if this needs AE or BE. We have instances of both in the article. An FAC issue, though ...
Let's leave it.
  • Ancient Rome "A" needs no caps if "ancient Egypt/Greece" don't do either. Same in "Connected fields" section
Let's use Title Case throughout.
  • At the end of the nineteenth century Put it in either words or digits throughout the article. Elsewhere you say 21st, not words.
Let's do words throughout.

Connected fields

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  • I think this section should be called "Connection between fields"
We are in "Maths and Architecture", so we are talking about fields connected to that.
  • Michael Ostwald and Kim Williams Who are they? You can add the author info from the cited source.
Glossed.
  • connected, architecture I think we need a semicolon or hyphen here
Reworded.
  • architecture being a profession concerned with the practical matter of making buildings, mathematics being the pure study of number and other abstract objects I think we can use "while on the other hand" or something to bring out the contrast more effectively. Commas seem lackluster.
Reworded.
  • being the pure study of number Number"s"?
Number is right. Linked.
  • the extra syllabus became the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy Should this rather be "the quadrivium of arithmetic, geometry, music and astronomy became the extra syllabus"?
Done.
  • among architects, namely to be Colon?
Done.
  • Link antiquity, geometry (only at first mention, presently linked at the second one), grammar, logic
Done.

Vitruvius

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  • I think conversion templates should be used wherever possible throughout "Harmonious spatial forms"
Done.
  • The influential Ancient Roman architect Vitruvius Vitruvius should be identified in the earlier section.
I think he's quite well defined there by what he said.
  • such as a temple depended on two qualities I think we should say "depends". It is a general truth in Vitruvius's opinion, we are merely stating that.
Done.
  • on two qualities, symmetria and proportion I think "proportion" should come before "Symmetria". That is alphabetical and also the order in which you put the definitions.
Done.
  • Basilica at Fano Links?
Done.
  • firmness, usefulness and delight Could these be discussed in an alphabetical order?
This is the order described by Vitruvius.
  • What is an "oculus"?
Linked. It's already glossed as "to let in light".....
  • There are seven types of room...two squares If both refs. 26 and 27 support this quote then both should be placed just before the quote.
Done.

Twentieth century

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  • Too common to be linked: circular, nature
Done.
  • "Modern Architecture" does not need italics
Done.
  • Guggenheim Museum, Bilbao Links?
Done.
  • leading architects Such as?
Reworded.

Take some rest, I am bringing more! Sainsf <^>Talk all words 10:48, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Religious principles

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  • Vaastu Shastra, the ancient Indian canons of architecture and town planning, employ symmetrical drawings I think "employs" sounds right. Shastra is singular
Done.
  • Who are Ifrah and Jackson?
Glossed.
  • Virupaksha Temple at Hampi (from 7th century onwards) I think you should write "built in the 7th century"
Done.
  • about the tallest, central, tower The latter comma is not needed
Yes it is, it brackets the gloss 'central'.
  • dwelling-place of Lord Shiva "the abode" would do better.
Done.
  • Who is George Markowsky? (Ancient Greece)
Glossed.
  • or to the pleasure of the Pythagoreans 42:62:92 May be "or, as Pythagoreans may prefer, 42:62:92 sounds more encyclopedic.
Said 'delight', with ref. It's well documented that the Pythagoreans delighted in numbers and ratios.
  • The Parthenon is considered By whom? Beware of the taggers!
Done, but there are a million sources for this.
  • What is the golden rectangle?
Linked. More golden ratio stuff, unfortunately.
  • More recent authors Such as? Is Markowsky an example?
Yes, and Salingaros.
  • Who is Antonio Fernandez-Puertas?
Glossed.
  • Can Hispano- be linked?
Linked Al-Andalus.
  • The Court of the Lions is bracketed by the Hall of Two Sisters and the Hall of the Abencerrajes Any linking possible?
Done.
  • and a strong aesthetic based on symmetry and harmony Is something missing here?
No.
Sorry, took "aesthetic" as an adjective. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 12:09, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • representing paradise May be considered an overstatement.
Added a representative ref. Again, could easily find a hundred.
  • A foreign term, "Darwaza-i rauza" should be in italics
Done.
  • Koch and Barraud?
Glossed.
  • Koch and Barraud, analysing these in 2006 --> In a 2006 analysis, Koch and Barraud
Dropped the date, it's in the ref.
  • In the last para of Christian architecture, convert 90 tons
Done, but what a hideous result.
  • Only a few duplinks in Mathematical decoration: Islamic buildings, Alhambra, fractal
Removed, but I wonder if these weren't useful here.
  • In Defence
  • Duplink: Vincenzo Scamozzi
Yes, it's a dup but I wonder if it isn't worth it here (it's allowed), as he's not well known and it's a long way from the other link.
  • mid-15th and nineteenth centuries Contrasting ways to put numbers
Good catch.
  • In Environmental goals
  • Does cucumber need a link?
Probably.
OK, no harm Sainsf <^>Talk all words 12:27, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "subterranean" may be linked.
Chiswick Chap I wonder if you missed this one. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 15:39, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Done, and yes I'd missed it! Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:54, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Very well then, this article deserves to be Good now. I promote this! This is a fantastic job, Chiswick Chap! Sainsf <^>Talk all words 15:56, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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