Talk:Martin St. Louis/GA1

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 14:24, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

College

"..at a midget age tournament.." – Is "midget age" encyclopaedic language?
It is. "Midget" is the name of a specific age group of minor hockey in Canada (15-17) and the US (15-18). (examples: Mac's Midget AAA World Invitational Tournament, Alberta Midget Hockey League)
"..both an ECAC First Team All-Star and NCAA All-American.." Might be worth clarifying with a note or link what these terms mean: particularly the latter.

Added a link to All-America to explain.

Calgary Flames

"..the majority of the season.." The article repeats this phrase twice in two lines.
Fixed!

Personal life

"with a double-major in community development and applied economics and consumer and advertising." Can you try and clarify which of the courses go together? At the moment, this sounds like a quadruple major!
Man, your guess is as good as mine. It confused me too, so I simply took it straight out of the press release. I found an older story, also from Vermont, that simply gave him as having a degree in small business management. Changed to that.

Overall, no major issues. The article is a little "listy" in places, reeling of statistics, but as with cricket, that can be an unavoidable aspect of hockey articles. If you can make it flow a little bit more, that would be great, but I'm certainly not going to make a fuss about it. The image in the "Awards and honours" section looks a little out of place to me, I'd rather it be in the prose section, but again, I'm not too bothered. However, the caption for that image does need referencing, as it isn't mentioned in the prose at all. Making good use of your Highbeam subscription I see! Just these minor issues, and I'll be happy to pass the article (think this might be the least comments I've made on a GA; maybe I should read it through again?!) Harrias ^talk 14:40, 14 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, the image was there when I started, and lacking a better place for it, I simply left it. I should actually see if I have a team Canada picture of him or something to replace (and relocate) with. Reso lute 00:01, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Bah. I did get a shot of him from the pre-tournament camp for the 2010 Olympics, but it isn't anywhere near decent quality. Oh well. Reso lute 00:06, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

No worries; if the image does remain, it does need a reference for the caption though. Harrias ^talk 09:53, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Nevermind, I found one myself; I shouldn't be so lazy! All good now. Well done. Harrias ^talk 09:58, 16 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Whoops. I completely overlooked that, thanks for fixing it up for me! And thanks again for the review. Cheers! Reso lute 15:02, 17 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]