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Under plural marriage, I edited the block quote to show that the second paragraph was not part of the quoted text. Jaj243 (talk) 19:11, 2 December 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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I work at BYU library and am using the resources of the library to add information on Cannon and add in-text citations. If there's an issue please let me know. Gandhi (BYU) (talk) 14:28, 9 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Also, I can't find a source for the dates the Hughes family left England or arrived in New York. I don't have a source for the family traveling in the Underwriter either.

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 00:20, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 00:20, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll copyedit as I read through; please revert if I make any mistakes.

With the rapid advancement of medicine, Brigham Young began recommending that church members become doctors. In a October 1873 General Conference address, Brigham Young encouraged women, specifically, to enter the medical field and become doctors: repetitive.
On August 13, 1878, Cannon was one of four women set apart for medical studies and practice by the Mormon Church. President John Taylor and his counselor George Q. Cannon set them apart. The four women were Romania B. Pratt, Ellis R. Shipp, Maggie Shipp, and Martha Hughes Cannon. Repetitive; just say "the other three women"; no need to list Cannon twice. And shouldn't we still be calling her Hughes at this point? Although if the sources we're using use "Cannon" for her early years we can go along with that.
Romania and Ellis had already received their medical degrees while Maggie and Martha were heading out to earn theirs: Generally you use last names; any reason to use first names here? I see two are surnamed Shipp, but we could make it "Pratt and Ellis Shipp had...while Cannon and Maggie Shipp".
When the secrecy around her marriage to Angus Cannon is discussed, the reader hasn't yet been told about the legal context for plural marriages (except in the lead, which is supposed to include only material in the body). I think we need some explanation at this point.
her letters to Angus grow with jealousy and resentment: suggest "show increasing jealousy and resentment".
30th annual convention at the American Woman Suffrage Association: shouldn't this be "of the", rather than "at the"?
After the Edmunds-Tucker Act passed, were Martha and Angus still technically husband and wife?
It seems odd that Cannon and her husband are opposing each other in the election, and are of different parties; were they estranged by this time?
You mention her speech at Seneca Falls twice at separate points in the article; can these be combined to a single description?
The influence of newspaper and religious leaders: either "newspapers", or if it's just the Deseret News, then "the newspaper".
Suggest linking KUED.
I'd cut the links in the "See also" section that are already linked in the article.
Not an issue for GA, but FYI: you have "accessdate" parameters on a couple of book citations that aren't needed. That parameter is used for accessing web information, and indicates the date on which you accessed the URL. That can help others find archived versions of a web page, since web page contents can change over time. For a book there's no risk of the content changing so the access date isn't needed.
I'd eliminate the "Find a Grave" link; it's not a reliable source as it's crowd-sourced. I think the obituary for Angus should be linked from his article, not Martha's; the same goes for the biographical sketch.

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:01, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Gandhi (BYU), are you planning to work on this article? I'll fail this in another week if I don't hear from you. If you need more time, let me know. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:26, 25 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Mike Christie, thank you for your review! I will finish up your suggested edits this week.Gandhi (BYU) (talk) 20:40, 1 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

No problem; let me know when you're ready for me to take another look. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 02:09, 2 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Mike Christie, I have finished my edits. If there is anything else that needs work please let me know. Thank you for reviewing this article! Gandhi (BYU) (talk) 21:03, 8 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

The changes look good. I made a couple more edits based on my comments above. Promoting to GA. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 01:36, 10 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Should "first female state senator" be moved closer to the beginning of the lead?

Guidelines for biographies suggest the opening sentence should establish notability, and one would assume being the first female to be elected state senator is an accomplishment notable enough to include.

From Lead guidelines:

"The first sentence should usually state:

Name(s) and title(s), if any (see also WP:NCNOB). Handling of the subject's name is covered under MOS:NAMES.
Dates of birth and death, if found in secondary sources (do not use primary sources for birth dates of living persons or other private details about them).
Context (location, nationality, etc.) for the activities that made the person notable.
One, or possibly more, noteworthy positions, activities, or roles that the person held, avoiding subjective or contentious terms.
The main reason the person is notable (key accomplishment, record, etc.)"

GA concerns

I am concerned that this article no longer meets the good article criteria. Some of my concerns are listed below:

The article uses a lot of long paragraphs. These should be broken up into smaller paragraphs to help with readability. This include the lead, and the first paragraph of "Plural marriage and exile"
On the other end of the spectrum, "Legacy and honors" is a list of disjointed entries that are not formatted correctly. I suggest that this be rewritten as prose.
There are uncited statements in the article.

Is anyone interested in working on this, or should this go to WP:GAR? Z1720 (talk) 00:20, 27 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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The article uses a lot of long paragraphs. These should be broken up into smaller paragraphs to help with readability. This includes the lead and the first paragraph of "Plural marriage and exile". On the other end of the spectrum, "Legacy and honors" is a list of disjointed entries that are not formatted correctly. I suggest that this be rewritten as prose. There are also uncited statements in the article. Z1720 (talk) 01:22, 19 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I saw the note at WT:MED. I have to confess that this doesn't strike me as a list of very significant problems.

The lead is a single paragraph of 220 words, which is a not-unreasonable size for a paragraph (in academic writing; bloggers are doubtless encouraged to have shorter paragraphs). The first paragraph of ==Plural marriage and exile==, at ~440 words, did strike me as long, but that was easily fixed by pressing the Return button once. If you feel that the lead paragraph should also be split, then I encourage you to go find some plausible spot in that paragraph and press the Return button yourself.

==Legacy and honors== sections are frequently presented as lists. I searched for "Legacy and honors", checked the first five articles in the results, and found that three were bulleted lists and two were prose. The tendency towards being disjointed is probably due to the facts, as there's no obvious way to unify so many disparate things (e.g., there's a statue...they lobbied for a stamp...someone else used her as a character in a play...).

I grant that using - formatting instead of * is not how we do things on wiki, but having an IP editor not know how to wikify a list is not really grounds for de-listing. I've fixed it. It took me about 30 seconds.

As for the uncited statements, every paragraph (but not the first bullet point in the ==Legacy and honors== section, which was added just a couple of months ago) contains at least one inline citation, and I suspect that those (especially the books) cover more than just the single sentence the citation is attached to. Perhaps, if you are interested, you would check those sources and duplicate the citations. Unfortunately, earlier this year, we ran off the editor most likely to volunteer to do this for you, so if you want it done, you're probably going to have to do it yourself. WhatamIdoing (talk) 20:22, 20 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]