Talk:Marshall Islands at the 2012 Summer Olympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:53, 26 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Going to review this article as part of a GAN sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 17:53, 26 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

All mentions of the "Marshal Islands" needed to be changed to "Marshall Islands" since that is the official spelling for the country.
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
All mentions of the word "olympics" must be captialized
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink the names of the athletes sent by the Marshall Islands at the first instance they are mentioned in the article.
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"and gained International Olympic Committee" - the International Olympic Committee needs its acronyms put in parentheses
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"during the IOC's on February 9, 2006." - Looked through the source and you need to clarify that the Marshall Islands' recognition occurred during the IOC's meeting in Turin, Italy on February 9, 2006.
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"This was the first olympic appearance for Garstang and the second olympic appearance for Nemra." - reword the second half of this sentence to avoid repetition of "olympic appearance"
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
For the second "The medals in the event went to athletes from Russia and South Africa." sentence, I think replacing the word "event" with "discipline" would be better for variety
- Done
"Haley Nemara competed in the women's 800 meter, where she finished sixth out of seven athletes in her heat." - Haley Nemara participated in the women's 800 meter, where she came sixth out of seven athletes in her heat.
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
In the key mini-section, all notes bar the first one should be removed since they are not used in the article
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"The medals in the event went to athletes from France, the United States, and Brazil" - missing a period at the end of this sentence.
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Ann-Marie Hepler competed in the women's 50 meter freestyle, where she finished third in her heat and placed forty-ninth in the standings" - Ann-Marie Hepler partook in the women's 50 meter freestyle, where she placed third in her heat and ranked forty-ninth in the standings.
- Done --Cameron₁₁₅₉₈ ^(Talk) 17:45, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Going to place this article on hold until all of the points raised above have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 19:38, 26 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]