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Reviewer: Kees08 (talk · contribs) 19:07, 24 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]


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1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.

Always capitalize Olympic and Games, when in the context of the Olympic Games.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:51, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Missed a few.
I think I got them all now?  Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:40, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Does Medal need capitalized? I do not think it is.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Stay consistent with spelling it meters or metres.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:15, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Is this proper grammar? - whose father is a native Marshallese

 Done removed the sentence --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This almost sounds sarcastic with the word definitely, rephrase it: who has definitely been to the Marshall Islands

 Done removed the sentence --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Did she return or not? - and is returning after graduation of 2012.

 Done removed the sentence --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Let's use 'as of' and use the population from 2008: The island has a population of approximately 60,000.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

During the IOC's what? - during the IOC's on

 Done fixed --Cameron11598 (Talk) 23:13, 2 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

of the Marshal Islands - admittance of Marshall Islands

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:39, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Athletics used too much and doesn't need capitalized: and a female athlete in Athletics at the 2008 Summer Olympics in Athletics

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:46, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink to their country's Olympic articles from that year, not to the country itself: from Jamaica, Trinidad and Tobago, and the United States.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:51, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Done for the swimming section and taek section, but do it for the athletics section as well.
 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 18:35, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

From: The Marshal Islands were represented by two athletes at the 2008 Summer Olympics in swimming,

To: The Marshal Islands were represented by two swimmers at the 2008 Summer Olympics,

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:41, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Change athletes to swimmers throughout that section. I think generally athletes compete in athletics, so I try to keep the names straight otherwise.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:50, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Change from colon to comma: in Taekwondo: Anju Jason.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:38, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Random 'both' at the end of the first paragraph in swimming.

 Done--Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:40, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Typo in Sports reference in the last citation

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:40, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Typo, should be heat: in her hear

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:40, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Typo in Marshall, currently spelled Marshal.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 18:32, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Typo in Marshall, currently spelled Maeshall

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 21:53, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.

Make sure all information in the lead is somewhere in the body of the article, and make sure the citations are moved from the lead to that portion of the article. Shouldn't need any citations in the infobox or lead.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 18:32, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Get the qualification information into the individual sections, not just in the lead.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 21:52, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.

Keep a common date format in the citations.

Do not include the website name in the title of the article.

Put the website name in as the website name for the last two citations.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 02:31, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Cite the population of the island in 2008.

It already is at the end of the paragraph... Citation number 5 covers that. --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:42, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Last thing, the following sentence does not appear to be supported by its citation: The Marshall Islands created its National Olympic Committee in 2001, and gained International Olympic Committee recognition in 2007 during the IOC's meeting on February 12, 2007.

 Done re worded and provided an additional citation. --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:06, 6 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
2c. it contains no original research.

This can't be right, there aren't that many pool lanes. Probably just means overall, they would have a different place for their individual heat. Same for the woman's paragraph: and placed forty-second in his heat

 Done fixed --Cameron11598 (Talk) 01:57, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.

Include how the athletes qualified for the Olympics.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 02:20, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.

I think the flag should have this added to the licensing section: {{Insignia}}

This can't be the right pd claim, can it? "it was published in the United States between 1978 and March 1, 1989" - does not really make sense to me since it looks like it was first published on wiki, as there is not a source otherwise.

Wow I missed that, should be good now got some help from the folks at commons --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:43, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]


6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

Captions that are complete sentences require a period at the end of them.

Let's get some variety in how the captions are written, right now the sentence structure is the same for each.

 Done --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:43, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
7. Overall assessment.
@Kees08:  Done ready for you to review again. --Cameron11598 (Talk) 02:36, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Kees08: should be good now. --Cameron11598 (Talk) 19:17, 3 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Kees08: Ready for ya again. --Cameron11598 (Talk) 18:35, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Kees08: Done again --Cameron11598 (Talk) 21:53, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@Kees08: Done, re-worded that sentence (corrected the information) and it should be good to go now. --Cameron11598 (Talk) 17:08, 6 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]