Talk:Marquee Moon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Niwi3 (talk · contribs) 15:46, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Niwi3 (talk) 15:46, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, pretty good article. However, there are a few issues that need to be addressed.

Check list

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

GA comments

The Fair Use Rationale of File:Marquee moon album cover.jpg is incomplete. Also, why have two summary boxes? --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Both the Background and Recording sections don't have enough content to warrant their own section. I think you should merge both sections into one called "Background and recording", where the first paragraph should be that from the background section and the second paragraph should be that from the recording one. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Once the band signed to Elektra Records, Verlaine insisted they not have to be guided in the recording studio by a famous producer." - Bad grammar. Perhaps, the band was not guided in the recording studio by...? --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Revised. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Nick Kent, writing in NME magazine", "Robert Christgau, writing in The Village Voice", "Ken Tucker, writing in Rolling Stone", etc - writing for [Insert magazine here]. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Revised. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Some unnecessary commas:
- "Their dual guitar playing drew on 1960s rock and avant-garde jazz styles,[9] and eschewed the layered power chords of contemporary punk rock" - Drop the comma so it flows better and move the reference to the end of the sentence. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - According to this, it's might be helpful to readers in sentences with multiple "ands". Citations don't necessarily have to be at the end of a sentence, but normally placed after adjacent punctuation such as periods and commas. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
    - Alright, you have a point. I just think it unnecessarily breaks up the flow of sentences a bit, but i suppose it depends on the reader. --Niwi3 (talk) 19:41, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "said that Television are ambitious and skilled enough to achieve "new dimensions of sonic overdrive", and hailed the album as an "inspired work of pure" - Drop the comma. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "Noel Coppage of Stereo Review panned the singing and songwriting, and wrote that the album sounds more like" - Drop the comma. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Multiple "ands", so wouldn't the "singing and songwriting" clause be independent of "and wrote..."? It seems like the comma would help readers and not necessarily be incorrect grammatically. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
    - I consider singing and songwriting as a whole. Either way, it's not really an issue and it's absolutely fine if you want to keep the comma (per above comments). --Niwi3 (talk) 19:41, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- "Gramophone magazine's Nigel Hunter found both Verlaine's lyrics and guitar playing vague, and felt that listeners need a" - Drop the comma. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The album's singles should be added to the infobox using the singles template. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Rolling Stone placed it at number one hundred twenty-eight on their list of the 500 greatest albums of all time", "ranked thirty-third by The Guardian, and twenty-fifth by Melody Maker on its all-time list", etc - Numbers below ten should be spelled out, over ten written as a number. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:02, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Dan56 (talk) 18:33, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

OK, all the issues have been resolved. Great work. Happy to pass! --Niwi3 (talk) 19:41, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]