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A fact from Mark Bonner (footballer) appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 10 July 2016 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
Did you know... that the footballerMark Bonner was forced to retire after suffering a broken arm during a league match against Port Vale in September 2005?
"to regain match fitness after falling out of favour at Ninian Park," - I am familiar enough with football to know what "falling out of favor" means, but for an uninformed reader "regaining match fitness" seems to reference an injury, while the phrase "falling out of favour" seems to reference no longer being liked by the coach. Maybe clarify the exact meaning here. - Reworded
"During his spell with the Bluebirds" - the use of "Bluebirds" here assumes the reader knows that the name references Cardiff City. Either link or add in Bluebirds after the first mention of Cardiff City. - Done
"During his spell with the Bluebirds, Bonner helped the club to three promotions in six seasons and suffered one relegation during the 1999–2000 season, reaching the First Division, and also played in their 2–1 victory over Premier League side Leeds United in the third round of the FA Cup in January 2002." - Recommend splitting into two or three sentences. - Done
"After two surgeries on the injury," - I don't think you need "on the injury" as it is presumed based on the previous sentence. If anything, maybe say "on the arm", since a surgery generally occurs on a body part, not on an injury. I.e. normal nomenclature is "I had surgery on my arm to heal a break" not "I had surgery on my break to heal my arm." « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 18:16, 27 September 2018 (UTC)- Done[reply]
"he joined the club on a YTS deal at the age of 15" - what is a WTS deal? - Added link
"He broke into the first team as a teenager, making his first team debut " - no need to say "first team" the second time. - Done
"He became a regular in the first team under Billy Ayre during the latter's final two years with the Tangerines at the age of 19" - recommend a rewrite, something like "At the age of 19, he became a regular in the first team under Billy Ayre during the coach's final two years with the Tangerines." - Done
"After recovering from the injury he managed to force his" - add comma after "injury" - Done
"Having come close to leaving the side in March 2003 after falling out of favour under manager Lennie Lawrence." - this isn't a complete sentence. I am guessing you were trying to connect it to the next sentence. - Done
"December 2003 as injuries took their toll on him" - "took their toll on him" sounds a little colloquial. Maybe something like "injuries decreased his playing time" - Done
"He grew unhappy after being excluded from the side due to a potential contractual bonus being triggered if he played another league fixture for the club along with Gareth Whalley, he left the club in March 2004 after being released." - the "along with Gareth Whalley" is confusing in this sentence and doesn't make it clear what you are referencing. Also, would probably be better written as two sentences. - Done
"Bonner instead joined Division Two side" - recommend removing "instead" as not needed. - Done
"His arm was pinned back together and he was originally expected to be out for eight weeks,[22] but his arm failed to knit back together correctly and, in November, this was eventually extended to an estimated three months out,[23] from the injury and was forced to undergo a second operation where surgeons were forced to graft bone from his hip onto his arm." - very long sentence, consider splitting into 2 or 3 sentences. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 15:15, 28 September 2018 (UTC)- Done[reply]
Personal life
"After his retirement from football, the pair later opened their own furniture store in Chorley." - the use of "later" is repetitive to "After his retirement". I would either remove or add in the year they opened the store. « Gonzo fan2007(talk) @ 18:10, 27 September 2018 (UTC)- Done[reply]
Career statistics
Why include reference 9 after each season? Just include it below the table or as part of an extra row at the bottom of the table stating the source of the statistics. -Added extra reference
