Talk:Mariah Carey (album)/GA3

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Reviewer: Blackjacks101 (talk) 22:42, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article soon =D--Blackjacks101 (talk) 22:42, 7 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Pre-Review Comments

Some links have errors like link 31 and 50 is dead (doesn't allow me to see info) , 53 is a DAB link (it talks about Madonna).--Blackjacks101 (talk) 00:55, 8 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Actual Review

Lead

on Columbia Records. -> by Columbia Records
Billboard Top Pop Albums -> why not just Billboard 200
reaching the top ten in Australia, Canada -> you just said Canada

Background

that he deal -> that he would deal
Mottola, very confident in her -> better if is said “Mottola’s confidence in Mariah led him to hire
How is Don Ienner or his quote relevant?

Recording and composition

Seven of Carey and Margulies' tracks made the albums final cut -> redundant you just said this
Key. -> uncaptilize (is that a word =D lol)
In the Second quote the “i” needs to be capital

Chart Performance

Billboard Top Pop Albums -> Billboard 200
to date, the -> to date, this is the
155 million copies -> somebody went 5 crazy
Mariah Carey was nominated for the 1991 Grammy Award for Album of the Year, while "Vision of Love" received nominations in the categories of Song of the Year, Record of the Year and Best Female Pop Vocal Performance. Carey won for Best Female Pop Vocal Performance and also received the award for Best New Artist.[3] - this should be put in Critical Reception

Singles

The Vision of Love section is wayyy to long it makes it sound kind of biased towards the single, if the reader wants this information they can go to the Vision of Love page. I will re-read this after the change is made. It also has no mention of the 5th single again showing a slight biased towards the most successful singles.

Live Performances

performed live in Sweden for the first time. -> where was it performed,

These are some problems I noticed, fix them and I will continue with the review.--Blackjacks101 (talk) 02:18, 8 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have now put the article on hold for 7 days, but as I can see Nathan like me your in exams should I will be easy on the time line. I would always offer an extension if needed =D--Blackjacks101 (talk) 19:40, 9 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

KK i just a few little problems with the Single section still. I don't thing you should put direct quotes when describing Vision of Love, just adding that it was critically lauded is enough, just so you don't sound too biased. You could maybe reference how many stars one reviewer gave it, or grade they give it...if any of them did. But I just find the quotes too much. Other then that I'll pass as soon as that is done. Great Job!--Blackjacks101 (talk) 01:30, 13 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]