Talk:Margaret (singer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 04:12, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Is it reasonably well written?
The first paragraph of the lead is weak in content, and should be expanded. How about adding that her manager discovered her through her blog?
Done

Conversely your second paragraph is a bit over-detailed. Perhaps trim that "In Poland, it was the third best-selling digital single of 2013 by a Polish artist." and "(the official song for the 2014 FIVB Volleyball Men's World Championship)"
Done

"contained three successful singles" - what defines a single's success is subjective. To be more neutral i'd drop the word successfully and instead add the single's chart positions in Poland.
Done

"Margaret gained worldwide recognition" - this might be a bit of a stretch. Did she get recognition in Asia, Africa, or the US? I can assure you she's not well known here in Australia. Consider a more neutral wording, perhaps 'gained recognition throughout Europe', assuming that's what the sources say
Done

"Margaret attended the Schools Complex" - what is the Schools Complex?
Done does that make sense now? I've added the explanation but I'm still not sure if the translation is correct and if there is a correct translation, should I perhaps use the Polish name instead and with the information in brackets it should make sense

What's the significance of the prefix "XIV" in XIV Liceum ogólnokształcące?
as in countries such as the UK many schools are named after saints such as St. Paul's High School etc. in Poland we use numbers and often Roman numerals are used however this is not a rule, should I change that to "14th Liceum ogólnokształcące" to make it more clear?
So there's 14 or more other Liceum ogólnokształcące's? In that case calling it the 14th or 'Liceum ogólnokształcące No. 14' would be more clear.
I would stick to No. 14

"currently resides" - please reword this as per WP:REALTIME. Perhaps say, "where she was still living as of 2015/6/7 etc,
Done

Can you tell us what genre of music 'oNieboLepiej (Much Better)' played? It would be of interest.
Done

Do your sources relevant to Margaret comment on the fact that Chris Marrs Piliero previously worked with The Black Keys, Britney Spears and Kesha? If not, you shouldn't mention people he previously worked with.
they do:)

"and the events organised by Andy Warhol" - this is a bit vague. What kind of events?
Done as the source doesn't state exactly what events influenced the video's directors I'd change that to 'Andy Warhol's work'

"with the likes of Joakim Buddee, Thomas Karlsson and Martin Eriksson" - drop "with the likes". Consider dropping Joakim Buddee and Thomas Karlsson altogether as they don't have their own wikipedia articles and are unlikely to be known to the average reader
I would keep them as they are the main producers and writers of the album.

"In November, Wprost named her one of the 50 Most Influential Polish Celebrities" - did they mention what number they ranked her at?
Done

I suggest rewording "bookies'", or at least piping it, to a more formal title.
Done

"Outside Poland, the single achieved considerable success," again, what defines 'considerable'? Your source doesn't say that. In fact, I'm not sure if that source would even be considered reliable. I suggest you drop the whole phrase 'Outside Poland, the single achieved considerable success,' and instead just directly say where it charted in Romania and Sweden.
Done

"in a Brant Hotel" - what is a Brant Hotel? Is it a hotel chain? Where is it?
Done

" were widely compared to" - suggest you drop the word 'widely' unless you can find several more sources, or a source commenting on how many other sources made the comparison
Done

"by her was bidden in aid of the local orphanages" - do you mean 'sold at auction'?
Done

"(who worked with the likes of Selena Gomez, Hilary Duff and Irina Shayk)" again, does your source relating to Margaret comment on who this man has previously worked with?
it does:)
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:
I'm going to assume good faith for most sources as I don't speak Polish.

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
Can we get an inline citation to 'Thank You Very Much' being called a sleeper hit?
as there is no source should I get rid of that?
On second thought I think it should be OK.

C. No original research:
Aside from minor notes above
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Aside from minor words noted above
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
I'm not convinced the picture of the university improves the article; I think it has limited relevance as her studies there are not of particular interest to this article/her current fame, but i'll leave the decision up to you.
Done Removed

The final image has the caption "Margaret at one of her concerts in 2016". This isn't as specific as I'd like it to be. I contacted the uploader on commons asking him to specify what country and the name of the concert/event. If you can't specify this, I don't think this image should remain, partially because you already have several better quality images with more detailed captions.
Done added the place and the date
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Article looks good overall. Placing this one on hold until issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 05:17, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Happy for this to pass now. Freikorp (talk) 11:38, 3 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]