Talk:Marcus Aurelius/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:24, 8 July 2019 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y (Has two very high percent matches due to mirrors of Wikipedia, all other comparisons show only incidental phrase matching) 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y
• No missing citations Y

Discussion

• Due to the high usage of links, I'd strongly suggest using Wayback Machine to archive all of them.
  • Will do this shortly Векочел (talk) 19:02, 8 July 2019 (UTC)

• @Векочел: Passing now, super sorry for taking so long, I went on vacation and forgot I had a GA review still unfinished. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:48, 24 July 2019 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. I've made a few edits, feel free to revert any you don't like.

Lede

• was a Roman emperor (from 8 March 161 to 17 March 180) suggest was a Roman emperor from 8 March 161 to 17 March 180
• Marcus was raised by his grandfather after his father died. suggest Marcus was raised by his grandfather, Marcus Annius Verus, after his father died.
• Antoninus died in 161. suggest expanding sentence with his cause of death.
• having at least thirteen children. suggest changing to having at least thirteen children of his own, of whom at least [number] were male.

Early life and career

Succession to Hadrian

• 'against the wishes of everyone' suggest saying according to [source], 'against the wishes of everyone'.
• For his dutiful behaviour, Antoninus was asked to accept the name 'Pius' suggest stating who the asker was.

Heir to Antoninus Pius (138–145)

• at the order's annual parade on 15 July 139. should clarify if he was made severi on 15 July 193, or if that is when the parade took place.
• direct evidence for membership, however, is available only for the Arval Brethren should mention what form this direct evidence takes.
• but it is said to have been 'noteworthy if you can track down the source, I'd recommend saying but [source] called it "noteworthy"

Fronto and further education

• After taking the toga virilis in 136, Marcus probably began his training in oratory. current structure seems a bit odd, suggest Marcus probably began his training in oratory after taking the toga virilis in 136.
• The latter two were the most esteemed orators of the day suggest of their time rather than of the day
• Marcus would become a Stoic. seems a bit short, perhaps In spite of the influence of Atticus, Marcus would later become a Stoic.
• The pair were very close. 'Farewell my Fronto, wherever you are, my most sweet love and delight. How is it between you and me? I love you and you are not here'. suggest The pair were very close, using intimate language such as 'Farewell my Fronto, wherever you are, my most sweet love and delight. How is it between you and me? I love you and you are not here' in their correspondence.

Births and deaths

• The boy did not survive long; on coins from 156, only the two girls were depicted. suggest The boy did not survive long, as evidenced by coins from 156, only depicting the two girls.

Emperor

Accession of Marcus Aurelius and Lucius Verus (161)

• His training as a Stoic, however, had made the choice clear that it was his duty. suggest His training as a Stoic, however, had made the choice clear to him that it was his duty
• Upon his accession he also devalued the Roman currency. if possible I'd expand on why this is significant.
• I added a link to Marcus Ummidius Quadratus Annianus, as I believe he was not earlier linked. Feel more than free to undo this if I was wrong.

Early rule

• Recently, he had served as procurator of five provinces might be unclear to average reader whether this would mean over all five at once, or all five in succession.

War with Parthia (161–166)

• Vologases entered the Kingdom of Armenia (then a Roman client state), expelled its king and installed his own – Pacorus, an Arsacid like himself. suggest Vologases invaded the Kingdom of Armenia, then a Roman client state, deposed its king, and installed a king of his own Arsacid dynasty, Pacorus.
• recently crossed over the limes. suggest explaining a bit the purpose of the limes if possible.
• Critics declaimed Lucius' luxurious lifestyle,[227] saying that he had taken to gambling, would 'dice the whole night through',[228] and enjoyed the company of actors.[229][note 16] note 16 seems important enough to insert into the prose of the page, as not everyone reads the notes, and not doing so could easily lead one to a wrong impression.

War with Germanic tribes (166–180)

• The peace could not hold long; Lower Pannonia did not even have a legion. suggest The peace could not hold long; Lower Pannonia was totally unprotected, as it did not even have a legion stationed within it.

Equestrian Statue of Marcus Aurelius

• This is perhaps due to it being wrongly identified during the Middle Ages as a depiction of the Christian emperor Constantine the Great and hence spared destruction, unlike some other statues associated with paganism. suggest This may be due to it being wrongly identified during the Middle Ages as a depiction of the Christian emperor Constantine the Great, and spared the destruction which statues of pagan figures suffered.