Talk:March Across the Belts/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Catlemur (talk · contribs) 10:44, 3 January 2021 (UTC)

I will start the review shortly.--Catlemur (talk) 10:44, 3 January 2021 (UTC)

• "annexed to Sweden"→"annexed by Sweden"

• "On Lolland: 2 250 men"→"On Lolland: 2,250 men"

• squadrones→squadrons

• "but no military decision had been reached" - reword this.

• "returned to their base in Stockholm for the winter break" → "returned to their base in Stockholm for the winter"

• "The Danish navy also prepared to disarm before the winter." - Why would they disarm? Do you mean cease operations?

• "and wished to regain the initiative of the war"→ "and wished to regain the initiative in the war"

• "The main alternative for a landing operation on Funen was with a small squadron of five warships from Wismar" - What does that mean?

• "led by ship major Tönnes Specht." - is this a transliteration of a Swedish rank? I would suggest that you write the Swedish term in italics or find another translation for it.

• Wikilink Wismar, ice floe, Jakob Kasimir De la Gardie, Fabian Berendes

• Use the convert template whenever you mention distances in kilometers.

• "Friedrich von Arensdorff with 50 horsemen and 150 infantry units to the island." - Do you mean a unit of 50 horsemen and 150 infantry?

• "a detachment of between 500 and 600 troops were sent across the ice"→"a detachment of between 500 and 600 troops was sent across the ice"

• Note 1 needs to be referenced.

• All references citing multiple pages need to be like this "pp. 167–168" instead of "p. 167–168".

• "According to some sources his troops numbered between 6,000 and 7,000 men,[1] according to others" - This is MOS:WEASEL.

• "some had merged into groups of a few dozen men" - Do you mean the strength of the regiments had fallen to a few dozen men?

• Is it Fabian Berende or Fabian Berendes?

• "the cohesive command link was broken as several officers" - remove several

• "but these were poorly dressed and had their feet frozen"→"but these were poorly dressed and suffered from frostbite"

• If the garrisons on Funen were starving then why did Vendsyssel and Samsø export grain to Lübeck?

• "Of these, 3,000 were cavalry units, while the rest were infantry units"→"Of these, 3,000 were cavalry, while the rest were infantry"

• Add Categories: 1658 in Sweden and Conficts in 1658, remove Categories: 1658 in Europe and Military campaigns.

• "the Swedish vanguard, consisting of 400 cavalry units" - "the Swedish vanguard, consisting of 400 cavalrymen"

• "where they clashed with Swedish reconnoiters." →"where they clashed with the Swedish scouts"

• "The Swedish soldiers put straws on their hats"→ put straw on their hats

• "against the Swedish baggage train on Brandsø" - Do you mean in Brandsø?

• "Of nine Danish cavalry companies" → "Out of the nine Danish cavalry companies"

• "a two-sided attack"→ two pronged attack

• I think a native speaker needs to take a look at the article before I conclude the review. So I would advice requesting help from WP:GOCE.--Catlemur (talk) 18:27, 6 January 2021 (UTC)

Fixed all your points mentioned above, Catlemur. Just received help from WP:GOCE, as well.--Alexander Alejandro (talk) 22:32, 1 February 2021 (UTC)

• Wikilink war reparations

• "Fredericia was of the same opinion as Carlson" - Who is Fredericia?

• "he became one of Sweden's most powerful servants" - Do you mean civil servants?

• Clarify that Stortorget and Kungstorget are a squares.

• "to unite the Nordic peoples already in the 1650s"→"to unite the Nordic peoples as early as the 1650s"

• "Svenska Dagbladet("The Swedish Daily News")" - space

• "in the Stockholm district Östermalm is named for the campaign" - after the campaign

• Danish major general von Ahlefeldt - capitalize the rank for consistency

• On Saturday evening - What day was that?

• demanded quarter for him and his soldiers - Wikilink quarter to Safe conduct

• a rapid fifty-mile march - use the convert template

• I don't think Niels Bang's quote about his family is necessary in the context of the article.

• If the caption of an image summarizes the already referenced contents of the article then it does not need to be referenced. Corfitz Ulfeldt's portrait for example does not need the explanatory note since his status has already been clarified earlier.

•  Charles X Gustav's quote on Berendes is likewise unnecessary. The article is extremely detailed and long as it is.

• "ice at Korsør fell through saved themselves from drowning"→ "ice at Korsør fell through but managed to save themselves from drowning"

• Capitalize margrave

• "two feet of water covered the ice surface" - use the convert template

Fixed, Catlemur.--Alexander Alejandro (talk) 00:02, 9 February 2021 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: --Catlemur (talk) 16:13, 9 February 2021 (UTC)