Talk:Mansouria, Tunisia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Quadell (talk · contribs) 19:27, 2 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator: QatarStarsLeague

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

This article is very strong, and is close to GA status.

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is clear and concise, without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
All issues resolved.

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
All issues resolved.
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:
All issues resolved.

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:
All issues resolved.

Specific issues

It's great that you source note [a], but you also need a source for note [b], that a cubit is about 18 inches.

Not sure where to find it. FunkMonk (talk) 15:31, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

A found a source, and added it. (That was surprisingly hard to find!) – Quadell ^(talk) 17:17, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

A non-muslim may not know who "the Prophet" is. A more NPOV designation would be "the Islamic prophet Muhammad" the first time (in the background section) and simply "Muhammad" thereafter.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

In some cases you use the serial comma, but in other cases you do not. It is best to be consistent, according to MOS:SERIAL.

Not sure where this is. FunkMonk (talk) 15:27, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I standardized all instances. – Quadell ^(talk) 17:17, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You link to Ismailism twice in the background section.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 13:47, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

In the background section you refer to the previous capital as "al-Mahdiyya", but in the construction section, you call it "Mahdia". Both link to the Mahdia article. It should be spelled the same in both cases, and linked once.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 14:04, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Standardize spelling for other terms, like Al-Mansuriyya, Kairouan (vs. Kairoun vs. Qayrawan), etc.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:14, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Please link terms the reader might not be familiar with: Banu Hilal, dirham, Fustat, Al-Mansur ibn Buluggin, Al-Mu'izz ibn Badis, etc.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:14, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

There seems to be an error with the page listing for citation 6. Also, citation 25 should use "pp." and an en dash (–).

Fixed latter, not sure what to do with the former, since I didn't write it. FunkMonk (talk) 15:21, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Fixed. – Quadell ^(talk) 17:17, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You should capitalize the prefix al- when it begins a sentence (in the background section).

Fixed, and removed where inappropriate. FunkMonk (talk) 15:10, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

This article frequently uses strict transliteration (e.g. "Abū Yazīd") when, according to Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Arabic, the standard transliteration without diacrics would be more appropriate (e.g. "Abu Yazid")

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:10, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

A comma is needed after "The walls were twelve cubits wide".

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:21, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Please reword the "It was here that" and "It was from here that" lines, since they could be worded in a more encyclopedic way. (Besides, it's not clear whether "here" means al-Mansurriya or southern Italy.)

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:27, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

When you say "The new city was rectangular rather than square in plan", I think you mean "rather than round", since that's what the source says. (And it just makes sense, since Al-Mansuriya had a round plan.)

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 13:51, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Many sources say Al-Mansur ibn Buluggin died in 995, not 996. I think that disputed detail could just be omitted.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 13:49, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Sources with ISBNs do not need "retrieved" dates. They also don't need page numbers, since page numbers are present in the citations.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:10, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed all issues, but three I can't solve... FunkMonk (talk) 15:31, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I took care of those. – Quadell ^(talk) 17:17, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]
By the way, it appears nominator had no hand in writing the article... FunkMonk (talk) 17:10, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Wow, you're right! I'd not realized that. – Quadell ^(talk) 17:17, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

FunkMonk, thanks for stepping in and taking over this article's nomination. I'm happy to promote it to GA status. – Quadell ^(talk) 17:17, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

No problem, in my experience, when a nominator hasn't edited the article in question, there'll be huge problems in getting it patched up... FunkMonk (talk) 17:24, 11 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]