Talk:Manos Arriba/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 06:24, 5 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Any updates on this? Aoba47 (talk) 16:21, 10 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I apologize. I will try to get to this tonight. Carbrera (talk) 00:58, 11 March 2017 (UTC).[reply]

No worries, take as much time as you need. I know it is a busy time of the year so I understand. I was just curious. Aoba47 (talk) 05:15, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

My review should actually be done within 30 minutes. Stay tuned ;). Carbrera (talk) 05:27, 11 March 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Initial comments:

Lead/Infobox

In all instance, Chana should link to "Eden's Crush" and not "Rosanna Tavarez"; it would probably be easiest to just search and replace for this

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I would place "English: Hands Up" instead of just the translation

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Maybe it's just my poor eyesight but is the album cover image fairly blurry?

I think that is just how the image looks. It looks the same to my copy of the cover from iTunes. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Suggestion: "than conventional" --> "than just conventional"

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"music critics describe" --> "music critics described"

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Chana's collaboration with Chan produced a diverse sound, incorporating vocal styles and influences from pop, reggae, power pop, and disco. " --> The infobox states "Pop" so I would place emphasis on this genre

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"in iTunes Latino" --> "on iTunes Latino" (This sounds more correct to me, mostly because on the iTunes Store sounds better than in the iTunes Store; do you get what I mean?)

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Which version of Popstars was Chana originally from? Because the linked article just brings it to the franchise page (there seems to also be separate articles for some of the particular installments)

She performed as a part of the American version of Popstars. I noted in the section (which was created as a part of the United States version of the reality television franchise Popstars) as the U.S. installment does not have its own page, most likely since it was not successful and canceled after a single season. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The link for "TV Guide Channel" should instead link to "Pop (U.S. TV network)"

I do not think that would be appropriate as Chana worked for the TV Guide Channel when it was known as the TV Guide Channel. Pop was launched in early 2015, and Chana was not a part of that relaunch so I think that would lead to some confusion or misinterpretation. I believe it would be better to keep it as it currently stands. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Recording and production

"Before working with Chana, Chan performed as part of an alternative band known as Volumen Cero and wrote songs for JD Natasha and Luis Fonsi.[6]" --> This statement might be a bit too trivial since it doesn't really concern the album at all; I'd suggest removing it

Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"They completed eighteen tracks and choose five of them for the EP." --> "They completed eighteen tracks and chose five of them for the EP."

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

Really good; well done.

Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

"Chana's show at the Hard Rock Cafe in Santo Domingo was praised by Adrian Morales of Dominican Today." --> Was there anything in particular he praised about it?

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Chana attributed her touring schedule to her view of rock and roll," --> Maybe it's just me, but I'm a bit confused by this sentence

I have attempted to clarify the statement. Here is the sentence from the source: (These days, Chana’s schedule is filled with gigs and she’s been crisscrossing the region, from Tijuana to Santo Domingo to Chicago and back. “It’s how someone defined rock n’ roll to me once,” she says. “You rock, you get in a van, and then you roll.”), but I can remove it if you think it is not necessary or filler. Looking back on it, it is a stretch. I wrote all of this in sections over a couple of days so I do not think this part is as successful as I originally thought it was lol Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Manos Arriba spawned two singes: "No Me Mandes Flores", "La Duda", and "Icaro"." --> "Manos Arriba spawned three singles: "No Me Mandes Flores", "La Duda", and "Icaro"."

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"In the beginning of March, "No Me Mandes Flores" was the third most downloaded song in iTunes Latino." --> Source?

The source is in the following sentence as the source covers both sentences. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

"Agustin Gurza" --> I'd state that he is from the Los Angeles Times

Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing

Generally, a source is provided to confirm the track listing; the album's official liner notes should do.

Added. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

ON HOLD – great work as always. Ping me when you would like me to "reexamine" it. Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 05:46, 11 March 2017 (UTC).[reply]

@Carbrera: Thank you for the review. I have addressed your comments. Let me know if there is anything else that I can do to improve the article. Aoba47 (talk) 14:44, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Just a passerby but in the "Composition" section, in the sound file, you wrote "the sing said" rather than "the singer said". PanagiotisZois (talk) 15:07, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your comment. Fixed. Aoba47 (talk) 15:24, 11 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]