Talk:Manal al-Sharif/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 23:05, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be reviewing this one. Give me some time to review the material. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 23:05, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Great, thanks. Just to give credit where credit's due, User:Boud was the main contributor to this one, but I'll be glad to do whatever's needed to take it to GA. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:18, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lede issues: References are not required in lede, but...

" A women's rights activist who had previously filmed herself driving, Wajeha al-Huwaider, filmed al-Sharif driving a car[6] as part of the campaign." - Why the ref not at the end of sentence?

Done -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Al-Sharif was detained and released on 21 May[7] and rearrested the following day.[2]" - Again.

Done -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Background - You use "Background" as a heading twice. I do not think that is a good idea.

Agreed-- Done -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Women's rights campaigns issues:

"As of 2011, women in Saudi Arabia have limited freedom of movement and in practice are not allowed to drive motor vehicles." - Out of date.

Done -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"As of 21 May 2011, about 12,000 readers of the Facebook page had expressed their support" - If it is a snapshot and not the current figure, use "By 21 May 2011..."

Done -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"On 26 May, authorities said that al-Sharif would remain in detention until 5 June 2011, according to lawyer Waleed Aboul Khair.[11]" - Bad prose. Is he her lawyer or just a lawyer? "According to Waleed Aboul Khair..."

I think your dispute is with the Associated Press style guide on that one. But rather than make an assumption I'll delete the word. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"As of 31 May 2011, it is unknown whether or not the charges were dropped.[9]" Update.

Done It appears she simply served those 10 days in jail on those charges and that was the end of it; I can't find any reference to further charges, so I'm removing this echo of the AFP reporter's confusion. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will post the template later, but these are the only concerns I have right now. The lack of updates and dated statements are a bit confusing. The reference issue is not a big deal. Just work on these issues and I will pass it. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 23:21, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the suggestions; I've implemented all of them. Just let me know if you see anything else that needs work. Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:49, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Congrats, it passes. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 01:31, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]