Talk:Malcolm Todd/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 07:20, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I will complete the review in a day or two. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:20, 14 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Optional — Right now, there are three separate sections depicting his career: "Early career", "Career at the University of Exeter", and "Career at Trevelyan College". — They could be written under one "Career" section with the existing sections as sub-sections, and with years in brackets. See William B. Jordan for instance.

"Since 1965" — It is a bit redundant since that part is mentioned in brackets anyway.
"Lecturer (1965-1974), Senior Lecturer (1974-1977) and Reader (1977-1979)" → "Lecturer (1965–1974), Senior Lecturer (1974–1977) and Reader (1977–1979)" — Dashes.

"At Hembury, Todd uncovered a previously unrecognized Roman occupation of the Iron Age hillfort. At Bury Barton he identified two Roman sites, including a fort. Todd also researched Roman mining of lead in the Mendips. At Charterhouse-on-Mendip, he found evidence of Roman galena ore extraction." — Nothing wrong with them per se, but it gets a little repetitive since every three out of four sentence begin with an "At" and are structured similarly. Perhaps rephrase the two of them in a different manner so that it doesn't read monotonously.
"Todd was Editor of Britannia for five years" — Could the years be mentioned in here? It would be more informative.
"where Todd conducted pioneering archaeological excavations." — Why it is considered to be "pioneering" is not explicitly clarified in the prose. Maybe a line in the prose might help?

"As he result he took an early retirement" — Perhaps it is → "As a result he took an early retirement" or "He took an early retirement"?
"After his retirment, returned to Exeter, where he continued to own a house." → "After his retirement he returned to Exeter, where he continued to own a house."
"and was survived by his wife and two children." — This phrasing should be avoided per WP:SURVIVEDBY.
"works such as Encyclopædia Britannica, Cambridge Ancient History and the Oxford Dictionary of National Biography." → "works such as the Encyclopædia Britannica, Cambridge Ancient History and Oxford Dictionary of National Biography." or "works such as the Encyclopædia Britannica, the Cambridge Ancient History and the Oxford Dictionary of National Biography."
"His bibliography includes three books about the Germanic peoples, on whom he was a well known authority." — Direct phrasing with "well known" should be avoided per WP:PEACOCK. Consider → "His bibliography includes three books about the Germanic peoples, on whom he was considered to be a leading expert."

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
It is a compact and well-written biography that covers every aspect adequately. It meets the criteria. Thank you for all your hard work. — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:31, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great! Thank you for this helpful review. The article has been significantly improved as a result. Krakkos (talk) 09:35, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]