Talk:Malcolm Grant (basketball)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:10, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

I'll have this to you soon JAGUAR  14:10, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "Subsequently he enrolled to the Villanova University to play for the Wildcats" - I would reword this slightly to He subsequently enrolled to the Villanova University to play for the Wildcats, but I'll leave that up to you

Changed per suggestion.

• "He grew up with three siblings Unique, the late Sayeed and LeVar" - needs a semi-colon: He grew up with three siblings; Unique, the late Sayeed, and LeVar. Also, would it be worth mentioning what happened to Sayeed in this section? I know that it's mentioned in the Miami subsection, but feel free to ignore this

Added a colon, rather than a semi colon. (Colon vs. Semicolon)

• "In the 2007 recruiting class, Grant was a three star recruit for all Rivals.com, Scout.com and 247Sports.com" - why is "all" here? Are these websites the only the only of their kind?

Removd all.

• "Orr's uncertain status as Seton Hall's head coach, made Grant to change his commitment to Villanova" - no need for the comma here

Removed unneeded comma.

• "In 11 games for the Hawks Grant averaged 10.2 points, 1.6 rebounds and 2.3 assists per game" - needs a comma in between "Hawks" and "Grant"

Added comma.

• "Team head coach Joe Salerno commented on Grant, "Since seeing him for the first time back in 2013..." - this either needs a colon or should read as Team head coach Joe Salerno commented on Grant, stating "Since seeing him for the first time back in 2013...

Added colon.

• "The point guard was also praised by the coach for his experience in the ACC in his college years" - is the point guard referring to Grant?

Yeap! The point guard is Grant and I put his name in the sentence instead of point guard.

References

• I think ref 44 redirects to something else

NBL Australia website was updated and their archive was lost. I found a mirror site and put its url as the ref's link./ I also added one more link for additional verification.

On hold

Nice work with this article! Overall it's in great shape and once those minor issues are all clarified then this should be good to go. JAGUAR  14:25, 28 November 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them! I've gone through the article again and can conclude that this meets the GA criteria. Well done JAGUAR  19:11, 28 November 2015 (UTC)