Talk:Mahmoud Kahraba/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 21:55, 27 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I know it is in the lead, but we should still have a BLP-compliant citation after "was terminated with Luzern citing inappropriate behaviour."
"an option to make the deal permanent, in August 2013." Who had that option? Him? Luzern?
FC Zürich is the article title, with the diacritic.
Similarly, Grasshopper Club Zürich
"loan feal with" typo.
"he squad,[16] He " Either decapitalise "He" or turn that comma into a period.
"substitute infor place of"
"2–2 fraw with"
" squad for their UEFA Champions League " Should likely use the link to whichever UEFA CL this was, rather than to the general article.
"agreeing a transfer to" Agreeing to a transfer to
Wikilink Egyptian Pounds, better yet if you can convert it into hard currency.
"was fined 500,00 Egyptian pounds" Either that comma is in the wrong place, or we need an extra 0.
"Atletico" Make sure you're consistent with the diacritics on the e
"requires surgery." Requires? Future tense?
"defeats to Uruguay, Russia Saudi Arabia" Needs an and
Ref 2 needs more details and formatting.
Ref 51 needs an access date.

Bunch of quirky nitpicks, really that's all. Courcelles (talk) 22:14, 27 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Courcelles: Thanks for another review. I've addressed all of the issues above, let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 06:50, 28 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]