Talk:Maharashtra/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 14:55, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Will have this to you within 48 hours ☯ Jaguar ☯ 14:55, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

Be careful of WP:OVERLINKING in the lead section. Cutting down on a few wouldn't hurt
"Places such as Pune, Satara and the surrounding area have many historical places associated with the Maratha Empire to visit" - I would cut or reword this, it almost sounds like an order and doesn't seem necessary if they aren't essential to the article
"The state is also dotted with caves from ancient Buddhist, Jain and Hindu times" - aren't caves prehistoric? Sounds like they were 'constructed' in those times given
"with large cities besides Mumbai such as Navi Mumbai, Pune, Nagpur, Nashik, Aurangabad, Kolhapur, Thane, Solapur, Amravati, Satara, Sangli and Nanded" - too long and listy! A few of the most important ones should be mentioned
For an article of this size and its significance, the lead could summarise the article better. Currently the lead is too 'listy' and could include more content on what Maharashtra's culture, history and geography is. I tend to follow the rule that the lead should act as a "mini article" and should summarise almost every section in the article
" as "one of the 4 great kings of the world"" - four
"Nagpur, which is the subcapital of the state" - "subcapital" is not a word or article
All the measurements in the Geography and climate section are in metric only, so they need to be converted to imperial using a conversion template per guidelines
"Sahyadri range, with an elevation of 1000 meters" - Indian English is 'metres', is it not?
The last paragraph in the Geography and climate section is vastly unreferenced
More overlinking in the Biodiversity section and less prose. I think to pass the GA criteria there needs to be more content here
"The state's six (seventh will be Nanded division operational from 23 February 2015 comprising 4 districts" - four
"The literacy rate rose to 83.2%. Of this, male literacy stood at 89.82% and female literacy 75.48%" - when were these stats recorded? Are the outdated?
" with the Pune Metropolitan area being the leading IT hub in the state.." - needs one full stop
"Important Cash crops include Sugarcane, cotton , oilseeds, tobacco, various kind of fruit" - should cash crops and sugarcane be capitalised? And "various kind of fruit" would sound more encyclopaedic as just "various fruit"
"(31–37 mi/h)" - mph
Education and social development section needs more references. The first paragraph is unreferenced
"Among seafood, the most popular fish is bombil or the Bombay duck, which is normally served batter fried and crisp." - is this important?
Literature section is a concern here, it is more of a list with almost no prose. The names could be cut back and more details added

References

Ref 1 is dead and unformatted
Ref 4, ref 6, ref 101, ref 104, ref 62, ref 69, ref 169 and ref 182 are all dead. These need to be either deleted or replaced with more reliable refs if the citations were important

Close - not listed

I'm sorry to do this, seeing as you had to wait a while for this to be reviewed, but in its current state the article cannot pass the GAN without a substantial group effort to satisfy it. There are too many prose issues and dead links, along with some sections with almost no prose and just lists. I'm sure if all of the above could be addressed then this article would stand a better chance at the next GAN, but for now there is too much work to be done in seven days. Good luck ☯ Jaguar ☯ 18:09, 30 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]