Talk:Maggie Roswell/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk) 13:41, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

This keeps catching my eye as I look at the list of GAC reviews, so here goes.

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:
See below.

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
This could be challenged, but I'm happy to let it slide here.

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

"and guest spots" Better term than "spots"?
"the 80s and the beginning of the 90s" 1980s and 1990s? Technically, you should be using an apostrophe there, but abbreviations should be avoided
"guest spots on" Again, is there not a better term for this?
"she voiced the one-time character Princess Kashmir" Kashmir's not actually a one-time character?
"Roswell was nominated for an Emmy Award for her work on The Simpsons" Year? What award? That's a big deal- I can't help but feel more should be made of it.
- The source only says "She was nominated for an Emmy on The Simpsons, and she has worked with people who have won just about every other award." This is the only other reliable source I've found that mention her Emmy nom, but I don't have access to it. Theleftorium ^(talk) 14:52, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Formatting of ref 23 ("Official website". Roswell 'n' Rayne. http://www.audiornr.com/. Retrieved 2010-08-05.) is a little odd.
(When checking through the sources, 25 said "There's a New Maude in Town"; 26 replied "Not true, 'Maude' says". Call me nerdy, but that made me guffaw.)

Ok, and while I'm here, I think this would make a great FAC candidate with a little further work. Some things to think about there-

Make sure all the sources are good. I note a potentially unreliable one above, but the formatting (page numbers being the one I noticed) is inconsistent on some refs.
I think there's a potential problem with the dispute- we've got to be very careful not to take sides here. I think it could be argued this is ever so slightly on her side.
I know it's tedious, but making sure all the roles have references wouldn't hurt.
Perhaps a little more on who she played in the prose in the earlier career? You go into great detail about a redlink play, but only mention feature films in passing.
- I've been unable to find any sources that cover this information. Theleftorium ^(talk) 14:52, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
The singing section is a bit... Pathetic, really. She's sung in a couple of pubs- doesn't seem to be much of encyclopedic interest yet, unless she has plans to go professional or something? She ever sung on screen?
- I merged it with the above section. Theleftorium ^(talk) 14:52, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1997, Roswell appeared in the film Switchback alongside Danny Glover and Dennis Quaid.[25]" is a one-line paragraph, which generally don't look good.

Good luck- I'm happy to pass this as a GA with only the first list of issues fixed, but the second list is some stuff to work on afterwards. J Milburn (talk) 13:41, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- I've fixed most of your concerns. I'm not interested in taking it to FAC, though. Thanks for the review! :) Theleftorium ^(talk) 14:52, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fair enough, though I'd say it's got potential. I'm happy to promote the article to GA at this time, very nice work. J Milburn (talk) 15:06, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Excellent, thanks! Theleftorium ^(talk) 15:14, 11 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]