Talk:Madwoman (book)

A fact from Madwoman (book) appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 12 March 2020 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that in the collection Madwoman, Jamaican-American poet Shara McCallum uses both English and Patwa, a creole she heard while growing up but never saw in writing?

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 8 January 2020 and 26 February 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Benjamin Fincher.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 00:24, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

plan for improvement

I wrote the first sentence for the introduction and added bibliography and one reference. I need to go through and thoroughly create a regular page probably based on the design of the faith of graffiti page I am also working on. I believe this could be a fun and fruitful project seeing as how no one has really written any articles on her work.Benjamin Fincher (talk) 04:31, 22 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

add more content including a summary of the work, awards, and reviewsBenjamin Fincher (talk) 04:02, 24 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Content

Need to create sub-headings and design the page to look better. Benjamin Fincher (talk) 04:31, 22 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

began separating the headings and diving the pageBenjamin Fincher (talk) 04:02, 24 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

added an info boxBenjamin Fincher (talk) 04:02, 24 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Bibliography

I created a bibliography but i'm not sure in the difference in bibliographies and references so I will work on that. Benjamin Fincher (talk) 04:31, 22 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I added a new source to the bibliography.Benjamin Fincher (talk) 04:02, 24 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Peer Review of Draft: Madwoman (book) Draft by Benjamin Fincher

Review by Angela Munoz

1. What does the article do well? What impressed you? I like the subject and the book sounds interesting. I can see that he has several sections he is working on at one time. This keeps the article balanced in the size and structure until all of the information is available and ready to publish.

Lead Section: According to the Wikipedia guidelines there really shouldn’t be any footnotes in the lead section. You could just paraphrase the same sentences. The second sentence is a bit choppy. Perhaps try this. “She dives into the depths of her struggles with racial identity and her own personal perceptions of being a black woman, despite having a light complexion.” The next sentence does make the author sound a little crazy, may need to soften the tone.

Clear Structure: Very choppy, needs a smoother flow. Needs some transitional phrases to pull it all together. Definitely needs a background, and this may be a better place to discuss her family’s history with schizophrenia.

Balanced Coverage: Needs some other sections like Background, Inspiration, and this would be a great place to include family history, family background, and maybe other books she has written that led her to this work.

Neutral Content: Information is all presented in a neutral way, no biases, could use a little more precise or gentle language when discussing mental illness. Should equally include her moments of clarity, as well has her crazy moments.

Reliable Sources: Some of the references may need to be checked (#5 and #6), some appear to be from book reviews and show with a price of the book.

2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes improve the article? Mostly needs some background info at least, needs transitional sentences to pull it all together. And you want to balance out the crazy with the clarity she saw in her experiences. This would create a nice clean flow, better organization of the piece, and create a balance of information for the author.

3. What’s the most important thing the writer could do to improve the article? Add some more paraphrased sentences and add a footnote. Not all sentences must be from direct quotations or paraphrasing. Some other commentary works about the author may shed some light on her personal experiences, and allow you to create a nice background or inspiration section.

4. Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know! I like that there are different topics that can be built upon. There are spaces to add information later, I should probably do this instead of working in a only one area at a time. Acmunoz14 (talk) 16:41, 8 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I really appreciate this feedback and will implement your suggestions for sure into the article.Benjamin Fincher (talk) 18:25, 9 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great start!

@Benjamin Fincher: Nicely done. I'd like to see an analysis §. Are there other sections we used in FOG that could be added, like background, publication, etc? Also, proofread; I see a few typos. Did you use a model article for your structure? Very good work so far. —Grlucas (talk) 23:03, 13 February 2020 (UTC) @Grlucas and Talk::I tried to add the additional information on background and publication but due to the limitations of the source I could not find any quality sources to create those additional sections. I figured as the source aged more could be added by future contributors. I will do some editing of the article as well. Benjamin Fincher (talk) 19:30, 18 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Also, I used a few different models based on different books of poetry I could find- I looked at Robert Frost books and how the Raven was outlined on Wikipedia.Benjamin Fincher (talk) 19:36, 18 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Quotations

@Benjamin Fincher: Could you tell me what happened here? (Also, in order for me to be notified, you must reply to me correctly.) Thanks. —Grlucas (talk) 14:29, 21 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Grlucas: I honestly have no idea. I had found two new sources I wanted to use for my work. I had added them to my sandbox and was incorporating the quotations and topics into the page. Benjamin Fincher (talk) 06:13, 22 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Grlucas: So I went through the different edits, and it appears two other users have made edits to the page but did not leave any notes under the talk page that I see.Benjamin Fincher (talk) 06:29, 22 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]