Talk:MS Dhoni/GA3

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Reviewer: Pharaoh496 (talk · contribs) 13:10, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Revieing currently, but this page is pretty unstable

My Inputs

Improve by adding dhoni's role and performance in the following

Do not touch the infobox many editors here are having their own field day with it. I have fixed it according to all specifications, do not dismiss it as "unnecessary", no. Its been there on many featured articles and it should stay.
There is absolutely nothing about the ICC tournaments. He was a winning CWC Captain, you'd think his wiki would have details. Refer to India at the Cricket World Cup and add, for all four editions.
He was criticised for many reasons during 2019 Cricket World Cup
Spat with Yuvraj and Sehwag
2009 T20 World Cup wc press conference
He was mentor at the 2021 T20 World Cup
IPL finals
Jersey retired by BCCI
Surge in popularity during 2023
Playing style should have his unique keeping technique, of which he has given many interviews
few pictures with team-mates
Better thumbnail picture, as it is already getting re-used below

All the above are personal comments and does not have anything to do with GA criteria. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 15:08, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I have often seen suggestions being made like these on GA reviews. I havent failed it, I have put it on hold. All these are valid points and go towards the improvement of the article. Pharaoh496 (talk) 15:09, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies. I was trying to give suggestions, but I understand your point. Pharaoh496 (talk) 15:29, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Cleanups:

Few places contain wrong grammar and punctuation.

Minor changes made; Need to be more specific on the instance to work on it. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 15:08, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The [IPL] section medal record has a small win and runner up bar for csk and a very large one for rps.

That is a construct of the standard medal box template. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 15:08, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

In [Honours] section the ipl 2023 has an ipl 2013 ref

It was a title error, correction done. Magentic Manifestations (talk) 15:08, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I think grammars all right. Pharaoh496 (talk) 15:10, 7 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Other editors, please feel free to add. Magentic Manifestations

@Pharaoh496 I have made changes for the specific points you have raised and reverted on the others. If you have further comments, you can point out the same. With regards to the subjective comments content of the article, other users and yourself can contribute as it has no relevance to the GA review or criteria. Thanks!

Pharaoh496, please return to complete this review. If you are unfamiliar with the process, please consult the GA instructions: "Once you start a review, you are committing to complete it in a timely manner. Do not stop half way through and just leave it." ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 16:21, 27 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I dont know why but I was not notified of the above message. I will get to it. Pharaoh496 (talk) 17:32, 27 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Magentic Manifestations A few more things I would like to say:

A bit of the [Early Career] and [Domestic Career] is repeated. I would suggest either merging it to form [Early and Domestic Career] or removing repetitions.
The bit about "Roar of the Lion" is repeated in [Outside Cricket] and [In popular culture]. I would suggest removing it from the former section completely.
I am not sure on this point, but according to Wikipedia:Minors and persons judged incompetent; shouldnt we remove the name of Dhoni's daughter?
"praised for his lightning-fast glove-work" (In [Playing style]); replace "lightning-fast" with a more formal way of conveying the same message.
In the infobox, under the awards; I propose removing everything else other than Padma Bhushan as that is the award Dhoni recieved during his Military career.

Other than this, it does meet the GA criteria. Well done! Pharaoh496 (talk) 15:42, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Pharaoh496 Revert to the points below:

Merging will not help as it will disturb the chronology altogether. Have modified the line.
Yes, removed the repetition.
Yes, name is not required. Removed.
Simplified phrase
Dhoni is primarily a sportsperson, so it was incorrect to have included it under military awards. It has been moved to the top of the infobox.

Magentic Manifestations (talk) 16:01, 29 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Passing it now. Congratulations! Pharaoh496 (talk) 08:13, 30 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]