Talk:Mérens horse/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 13:29, 6 June 2013 (UTC)

• I propose to take on this review and will be studying the article in detail shortly. On first inspection it looks like a well-written, comprehensive article. I see good use has been made of the French language equivalent. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:29, 6 June 2013 (UTC)

First reading

• In the lead section, you need to be careful to be consistent as to whether "Mérens" is singular or plural. For example you say "In the past, the Mérens was ..." and in the next sentence "Today they are mainly used as saddle horses ..."
• "In the second half of the 20th century, the population sharply declined, as mechanization transferred work in the cavalry and agriculture fields to machines." - The word "fields" is not ideal here. Are you referring to fields on a farm or uses such as for cavalry work and agricultural work?
• "... between 1975 and 1985 their population rebounded, leading them to be considered an example for the conservation of rare breeds." - I guess its not the horses that are the example but the conservation methods used.
• "... and recommends efforts focused on its preservation." - perhaps "... and recommends that efforts should be focused on its preservation."
• "The head a straight or slightly concave facial profile, a flat forehead, and wide, short ears." - This sentence lacks a verb.
• The article needs to be consistent about the breed's name. It starts off "Mérens" and changes to "Merens".
• "Merens are found mostly in northwestern Italy, in the provinces of Cuneo and Turin, but in the past years it has spread to other mountain regions ..." - Confusion over singular and plural again.
• "In 1950 in Senegal, the Merens was used in attempts to create a horse tougher than the native M'Bayar, but it was not enough to revive the Merens." - To what does the "it" in this sentence refer?
• "He moved the efforts of farmers towards breeding a pony, ..." - This needs clarification.
• "A few members of the breed are bred for their milk, ..." - This is rather awkwardly expressed.
  • That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:34, 6 June 2013 (UTC)
    • Thank you very much for the review! I should have a chance to address the above points this afternoon; if not, then definitely tomorrow. Dana boomer (talk) 11:46, 7 June 2013 (UTC)
      • I think I have addressed all of the points above. Please let me know if you have further comments. Thanks, Dana boomer (talk) 16:32, 7 June 2013 (UTC)

• I found a few other "Merens", mostly among the references, which I altered for you. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:10, 8 June 2013 (UTC)

GA Criteria

• 1a The article is well written. Certain phraseology referred to above has been improved.
• 1b The article conforms with the MOS guidelines as to layout, section headings, spelling etc.
• 2a&b The article is well referenced and has inline citations for all contentious statements.
• 2c There is no original research as far as I can see.
• 3a&b The coverage is broad enough and the article does not include irrelevant material.
• 4 The article is neutral
• 5 The article has been enlarged by the nominator beginning in April 2013, incorporating material translated from the French Wikipedia. The article is stable.
• 6 Some images are in the public domain, having been created over one hundred years ago, others are appropriately licensed.
• 7 The images are relevant to the topic and have suitable captions.
• Overall assessment - Pass.