Talk:Luxembourg in the Eurovision Song Contest/GA1

GA Review

Passed.

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Nominator: Sims2aholic8 (talk · contribs) 17:30, 28 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:07, 23 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Long wait you've had at half a year for this article, I will give you what you deserve now! --K. Peake 17:07, 23 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good!
"The nation did not return to" → "The nation declined to return to" per the body's wording
"when the nation was represented by" → "when represented by"
"won the contest in" → "won the Eurovision Song Contest in"
"and within the top ten 20 times." → "and the top ten 20 times."
You should mention the relegation and non-participation was from 1993
Merge the third para with the second one

Contest history

Wikilink Luxembourgish to itself
The source says 37 but this should be 38 per how many it has been by 2024; can you please source the correct number?
Img looks good!
[8][9] should be swapped per the order of information
Remove wikilink on Luxembourgish
[7] is the ref sourcing the last sentence of the last para rather than [6]

Relegation, absence and return

"contest, and participation in" → "contest and participation in"
"viewing public, and poor results" → "viewing public and poor results"
"on 1 December," → "on 1 December 2023,"
"and a thirteenth place finish" → "and a 13th place finish" per MOS:NUM
"in Switzerland, and that work had" → "in Switzerland and work had"

Participation overview

Remove the semi-final part of the table because this only has one contest; I would simply add a note next to that participation
Remove wikilinks on "Chansons pour ceux qui s'aiment", "Monsieur" and "Sou fräi" since these are redirects

Congratulations: 50 Years of the Eurovision Song Contest

"fiftieth anniversary, with fourteen songs from" → "50th anniversary, with 14 songs from" per MOS:NUM
Remove wikilinks on "Poupée de cire, poupée de son" and France Gall
"among the fourteen selected songs." → "among the 14 selected songs."

Hostings

Img looks good!
Shouldn't there be a comma before the usage of respectively?
Change to the UK's instead of United Kingdom
Pipe Luxembourg to Luxembourg City on the table

Related involvement

Heads of delegation

Good, apart from the table which I do not see the purpose of for one event

Conductors

I don't think a comma is needed before "or"
Centre the ref column

Jury members

"participation history, and has" → "participation history and has"
Remove pipe on RTL Hei Elei

Commentators and spokespersons

I think RTL9 should only be wikilinked on the first instance of the table since they are easily identifiable after
Ditto for RTL (Luxembourgian TV channel)

Stage directors

This should be wrote out in prose since it is only one person

Photo gallery

Good

Notes and references

Notes

Good

References

Copyvio score looks slightly too high at 41.5%; please cut down direct quoting to resolve this
Fix all of the dead links using the tool
(EBU00 → (EBU) on ref 15
What exactly makes Languages and You a reliable source on ref 19?
EBU → European Broadcasting Union (EBU) on ref 22
Pipe RTL Today to RTL Group on refs 21, 32, 38, 52, 64 and 76 and always cite as publisher only
Cite ESCToday as publisher instead on ref 24
Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 38
Cite L'essentiel as newspaper instead on ref 44
Remove or replace ref 46 since that is basically a fan website
Solely cite DR for refs 48 and 50
Remove eurovision.tv from ref 49
Cite Eurovoix as publisher instead on refs 53 and 127
Wikilink Telos Publishing on ref 66
Shouldn't ref 77 cite just one of RTL Infos or RTL?
Cite Revue Agenda as magazine instead on all those refs

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed after this two-day review! --K. Peake 21:18, 24 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- @Kyle Peake: Thanks very much for the thorough review! Some additional comments below:
  - You should mention the relegation and non-participation was from 1993: I feel that this is already covered by the current wording in the lead (specifically the second sentence of the first paragraph), but if you have any further thoughts on how this could be made clearer then please do let me know.
  - I have added a new source from the Luxembourg Times (new ref 8) to cover the increased participation number.
  - [7] is the ref sourcing the last sentence of the last para rather than [6]: Ref 6 does state Luxembourg's final decade at the Contest saw a swift decline in their results, with the country finishing 20th or lower in 4 of their last 7 Contests. so I believe that this does source the last sentence already (as no more than 25 countries competed within the contests between 1987 and 1993).
  - For your comments on the participation table, as this is a series of articles all with a similar structure I would prefer to retain the semi-finals column. I think it also provides context at a glance that there were no semis between 1956 and 1992, as well as providing the link to Kvalifikacija za Millstreet for the 1993 contest. I do understand your comment around there only being the one event at the moment, hence I removed sortability from these columns for now. Per MOS:REDIR I am also suggesting that the three songs you listed above remain linked, since they do not fail WP:SELFRED.
  - Heads of delegation and creative directors sections have now been moved to prose as suggested.
  - The high copyvio score I believe is mainly due to the inclusion of the Christophe Goossens quote in the Contest history section. As this is a direct quote, and I have used the blockquote template, I believe that besides this there is no copyvio issue. Do let me know if you have any other concerns around this.
- Other than those points I believe I have covered all aspects of your review, but do let me know if there is anything else alongside your response to my comments. Sims2aholic8 (talk) 11:42, 25 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sims2aholic8 Thank you for the response, however you still have some issues to be worked on. The copyvio is still too high from the Christophe Goossens direct quote, change "participation history, and has" → "participation history and has", remove wikilink on France Gall in the Congratulations, remove wikilinks on the articles I identified as redirects in participation overview and wikilink Luxembourgish to itself instead. --K. Peake 21:15, 25 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake: Thanks for pointing out those additional areas which I missed the first time, almost all of which I believe I have resolved. I have removed the quote entirely, and the copyvio score is now below 20% (the highest of 18% is for a betting company article which repeats similar wording several times). As I said above, with regards to the redirected song articles, there is a case to be made to retain these links per WP:NOTBROKEN; I am also curious as to why you point out those three songs in particular, as there are several other links to redirects within that table and none of these redirects violate WP:SELFRED (the three you mentioned in particular redirect to sub-articles about those yearly participations and not to this article). Sims2aholic8 (talk) 08:00, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

✓ Pass now, I understand your reasoning for these points so they can be let to slid! --K. Peake 09:08, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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