Talk:Luochahai City/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Bremps (talk · contribs) 21:39, 21 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

You have been waiting too long for this, so I will review now of course! --K. Peake 11:05, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The infobox release date may be of the song on the album, but this still needs to be sourced in the body
Remove jazz and rhythm and blues from the genres since these are only sourced as elements
Remove full-stop at the end of the length
Audio sample should be in the body instead with info added to the text
The lead is too short; information needs to be added about the composition, more on lyrics and reception too
"The song is inspired by" → "The song was inspired by" and shouldn't the name of the story be surrounded by speech marks?
"Described as Dao's "comeback anthem"," should be re-worded as something to make it more clear that this was after he produced little for a decade
"it was streamed over 10 billion times within two months of its release," → "it was viewed over 10 billion times within two months of release," per the body
"and attracted widespread speculation as to the meaning of its "cryptic" and "absurd"" → "The song attracted speculation as to the meaning of its satirical" to summarize better, starting a new sentence and add a bit more about the lyrical content of the song too

"(as of January 2005)," → "by January 2005,"
[3][1][4][5] should be in numerical order
[3][1][6] should be in numerical order
Change "in 2023" to mentioning the exact date of the album instead so the release date in the infobox is sourced

Move img to the left
The story named in the infobox should be mentioned in prose here for it to properly sourced

[3] should only be invoked at the end of the first sentence not after cryptic too, as the end is literally next from this
Ditto for the Ludwig Wittgenstein sentence especially since there is another ref backing this up
Pipe compound ideograph to Compound ideographs itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
Img looks good!
"Chinese music industry, including Na Ying," → "Chinese music industry, including Ying,"
"believed that this song" → "believed that the song" but this quote does not appear to be sourced
"readings draw parallels" → "readings drew parallels"
"that dominates throughout."" → "that dominates throughout"." per MOS:QUOTE

Retitle to Reception since chart performance counts as a form of this
Mention the names of any reviewers who are identified from the sources
"volcanic anti-establishment mentality."" → "volcanic anti-establishment mentality"." per MOS:QUOTE
"Singer Wang Feng, who is possibly" → "Feng, who is possibly" since his full name was already used in the previous section

[3] does not need to be invoked since it is already at the end of the same sentence as the note in prose

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this was fast after your long wait! --K. Peake 16:16, 29 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]