Talk:Luis Vernet/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:28, 2 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:28, 2 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

Reference titles shouldn't be in all-caps; fix that.
A few refs cite a book but do not provide an individual page number; if a book is used once make that a priority over the total number of pages.
There are several unsourced paragraphs, and the Falkland venture section is almost entirely unsourced, and in fact emigration is completely unsourced.
"On the one hand he is considered as a national hero in Argentina as he was proclaimed Governor of the Islands by the Republic of Buenos Aires in 1829, on the other he is perceived as an unpatriotic merchant who acted in his own interest and made a pact with the British." This isn't really delved into the article at all, and if that's going to be a key part of the lead, it needs to be.
The article needs a copyedit throughout, as I'm finding things like "Lt Smith the first British resident set about making the buildings habitable." where there should be commas after Smith and resident.

Based on the above points, I don't think it can realistically become a GA soon, so I'm unfortunately going to fail it outright. After the concerns are addressed, I would suggest trying WP:PR to get another pair of eyes relatively quickly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:59, 2 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]