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GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 07:18, 11 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Happy to review the article. AM

Review comments

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Lead section / infobox

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  • Unlink United States; World War I (MOS:OL].
  • Fascism generally has no capitals.
  • Luigi Galleani (1906) - I would amend the caption in the infobox to ‘A 1906 police photograph of Galleani’
  • There is no need to link Italy twice in the infobox.
I see. I would then replace the first Italy with 'Kingdom of Italy'. The second Italy I would leave unlinked as 'Kingdom of Italy', and not bother to use the separate link. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:20, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Replaced with "Kingdom of Italy" in both cases. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:28, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

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  • Pietro Gori needs to be introduced.
  • On August 12, 1861, Luigi Galleani - ‘Luigi Galleani was born on 12 August, 1861’ sounds better imo.
Yes. Personally (and I think others would agree), I think DMY work well as the numbers are separated by text. Amitchell125 (talk) 16:50, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link anarchism.

Labor movement activism

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  • Link Turin; Biella.
  • between the two - ‘between the two parties’ is clearer.
  • Unlink France; Switzerland.
  • Introduce Elisee Reclus, Giovanni Domanico, and Filippo Turati.
  • honour – a British spelling in an article with American spellings?
  • Avoid stillborn; spearheaded, which are idiomatic (see MOS:IDIOM).
  • Add a comma after in Vercelli (minor point).
  • However, relations between the anarchists and the POI were again worsening – consider amending to something like ‘Relations between the anarchists and the POI worsened’, to improve the prose.
  • In 1889 - ‘threatened him with arrest in 1889, he fled’ or ‘threatened him with arrest, in 1889 he fled’?

Exile

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  • Link conspiracy; extradition.
  • married Maria – a surname, if known, should be included here.
Try this, which comes from Senta (2019) (already in the Further reading section). The name provided is Rallo. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Added surname. --Grnrchst (talk) 12:30, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • Salvatore is not notable, and so need not be distinguished from his siblings by being mentioned by name.
  • Why eventually?
  • Unlink Egypt; United States.
  • Introduce William McKinley.

Life in the United States

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  • Duplicate link - capitalism.
  • He escaped to Canada – this connects with the text in the previous paragraph, so I would consider combining the two.
  • launched a – ‘launched’.
  • Unlink North America (MOS:OL).
  • by authorities – ‘by the authorities’.
  • Introduce Francesco Saverio Merlino in the text.
  •  Done Introduced as "Neapolitan socialist"
  • In 1905, - the comma not needed imo.
  • Arrested, he was brought back to Paterson and tried – ‘He was arrested and tried’?
Understood. AM
  • Galleani is mentioned by name 15 times in this section, which is excessive. Once per paragraph? (This comment could apply elsewhere.)

Deportation and death

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  • This made him a target – it needs to be clearer as to what This is referring to.
  • To avoid the issue with the punctuation at the end of the sentence, consider amending publishing them together in 1925 as the book The End of Anarchism?. To something like ‘publishing them together in his book The End of Anarchism? (1925)’.
  • Introduce Errico Malatesta; Benito Mussolini.
  • He spent time – ‘Galleani spent time’ makes the prose clearer.
  • the passage – it’s unclear what is being referred to here.
  • Unlink Mexico.
  • police surveillancepolice seems unnecessary, as the police are mentioned again a little further on.

Political ideology

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  • Duplicate links - anarcho-communism; reformist; propaganda of the deed; assassination of William McKinley.
  • Introduce Max Stirner; Peter Kropotkin.
  • He defended – ‘Galleani defended’.

Legacy

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  • a campaign of terrorist attacks – briefly, where did these attacks take place?
I think of the dates of the bombings, how many attacks took place, and a mention of how devastating they were would be useful. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:37, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Amitchell125:  Done Ok, I've added details about the attacks. How's this? --Grnrchst (talk) 12:53, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Looks a lots better. AM
  • series of bombings – consider extending the link to ‘series of bombings in 1919’.
  • Duplicate link - Italian Fascism.
  • Introduce Nicola Sacco and Bartolomeo Vanzetti.
  • sentenced to death – it’s not clear here that the sentence was actually carried out (it was).
  • received an English language translation – ‘was translated into English (unlinked).
  • The section has four short paragraphs – consider combining a couple (e.g. 2 and 3)?
  • which killed 33 people - I would check this number, as not all the sources agree with it.
  • Cited source does say "causing an explosion that killed 33 persons". It is itself citing the following sources:
  • Cannistraro, Philip V. 1996. “Mussolini, Sacco-Vanzetti, and the Anarchists: The Transatlantic Context.” Journal of Modern History 68: p. 39;
  • Whelehan, Niall. 2005. “Political Violence and Morality in Anarchist Theory and Practice: Luigi Galleani and Peter Kropotkin in Comparative Perspective.” Anarchist Studies 13: pp. 160–161;
  • Young, William, and David E. Kaiser. 1985. Postmortem: New Evidence in the Case of Sacco and Vanzetti. Amherst: University of Massachusetts Press, p. 126.
How should I proceed with this? --Grnrchst (talk) 20:10, 15 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Let's be anarchic and let it be. Amitchell125 (talk) 11:43, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Selected works

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  • This section need only be a list of works (see WP:MOS-BIBLIO). If you want to keep the full citations, the section would need to follow the References section.

See also

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  • L' Adunata dei refrattari is linked in the article, and so shouldn’t be listed here.

Bibliography

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  • There is a url available for Avich’s chapter here.
  • Senta (2019) is used, and so should not be listed here.
  • The spot checks I did seem fine.
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  • GALLEANI – no capitals should be used
  • The section needs to be checked to make sure the titles match the actual websites, as they don’t all do this at present.

On hold

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I'm putting this highly readable article on hold for a week until 23 July to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 18:43, 15 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Amitchell125: Ok, I think I've addressed everything! Let me know if there's anything more I can do from here. --Grnrchst (talk) 11:04, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Passing

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Pass the article now, congratulations. Amitchell125 (talk) 16:55, 16 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.