Talk:Lucky (Britney Spears song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 18:26, 16 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It was released on August 8, 2000, by Jive Records as the second single of the album. --> No comma is needed here.
No need for the quotes around Lucky; it's a name.
and noted that the lyrics are actually about Spears herself. --> and noted the lyrics to be about Spears herself.
and portrays Spears as herself and a melancholy movie star called Lucky, who just want to have some fun in life. --> and portrays Spears as herself and a melancholy movie star Lucky, who just want to have some fun in life.
Country singer Taylor Swift covered the song on her Speak Now Tour in 2011. The cover received positive appreciation from contemporary critics. --> Don't think that this is too important for the lead.
The infobox says the song was recorded in November 1999, but in the article it says November to January.

which was written and produced by Martin and Rami, while Alexander Kronlund wrote additional lyrics --> which was co-written and co-produced by Martin and Rami, with additional co-writing from Alexander Kronlund.
After going back to the United States, the singer revealed in an interview with MTV News, "I just got back from Sweden, and did half [of] the material [for Oops!] over there. I was really, really happy with the material, but we had [such] limited time to get so much done. So I've just really been in the studio nonstop, which is cool, though." --> Upon returning to the United States, the singer revealed in an interview with MTV News that: "I just got back from Sweden, and did half [of] the material [for Oops!] over there. I was really, really happy with the material, but we had [such] limited time to get so much done. So I've just really been in the studio nonstop, which is cool, though."
song that lasts for 3 minutes --> for is not needed.

David Veitch of Calgary Sun said the song is a "sweetly melodic mid-tempo song", and, regarding the lyrics, completed, "we feel her pain." --> David Veitch of Calgary Sun said the song is a "sweetly melodic mid-tempo song" and regarding the lyrics completed "we feel her pain".
Billboard magazine contributor Chuck Taylor praised "Lucky", and featured the song on the Spolight column of his Singles Review section, saying, "its contagious melody, bang-in-your-brain hook, the empathetic theme of a girl who's the world biggest superstar and yet feels all alone (hmm...) will make it an easy sell to top 40 radio and to her grand legion of dedicated fans." --> Billboard magazine contributor Chuck Taylor praised "Lucky" and featured the song on the Spolight column of his Singles Review section. Taylor stated that: "its contagious melody, bang-in-your-brain hook, the empathetic theme of a girl who's the world biggest superstar and yet feels all alone (hmm...) will make it an easy sell to top 40 radio and to her grand legion of dedicated fans".
Managed isn't really the proper word to use. It makes it sound as if it was struggle and eventually got there. No need for the comma after United States.
No need for the common after "On the week of August 28, 2000" either.

I've went and done this part myself. There were a few issues with grammar and wording.

Cover --> cover version, or versions
Spears first performed "Lucky" live on 2000s Oops!... I Did It Again World Tour. The performance of the song featured a navy theme.[20] The song was last performed on the Dream Within a Dream Tour (2001–02) --> Spears performed "Lucky" live for the first time during her Oops!... I Did It Again World Tour in 2000. The performance of the song featured a navy theme.[20] Spears performed the song for the last time during her Dream Within a Dream Tour (2001–02). --> Not really if sure if it should be even mentioned it was the last time. It's not as if she is dead now or anything. She could do it again on her next tour.
Covered --> performed
The tour is the Speak Now World Tour
located on Louisiana --> in Louisiana

I've fixed everything, take a look. The Musicnotes url does not change path and the disque en france one also stays the same. - Saulo ^{Talk to Me} 21:30, 16 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I am pleased enough with the article to pass it. Great work! I just noticed that the sample should be a bit shorter, but I'm sure that's no problem, as it close enough to the desired length. Statυs (talk) 22:27, 16 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]