Talk:Lucius Caesar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 06:30, 24 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Came in to work on the peer review, saw it was at GAN. Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 06:30, 24 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.b Y
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2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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No DAB links Y
No Dead links Y
Images appropriately licensed Y, both images are licensed appropriately.

Prose Suggestions

on 20 August AD 2, in Massilia, Gaul add a comma after Gaul.
His father was an early supporter of Augustus (then "Octavius") during the Final War of the Roman Republic that ensued as a result of the assassination of Julius Caesar in 44 BC. Marcus Vipsanius Agrippa Suggest you switch the usage of "his father" in first sentence and full name in second sentence.
Augustus' armies, having seen command in pivotal battles suggest change to Augustus' armies, commanding troops in pivotal battles
Augustus who was seemingly on his deathbed in 23 BC, Add a comma after Augustus.
only the emperor and his immediate heir could hope to attain. The tribunician power allowed him to control the Senate, and it was first given to Julius Caesar and could only be held by the emperor. seems to be redundant and contradictive; could only the emperor hold it, or could him and his immediate heir hold it? If both could, remove the and could only be held by the emperor., if only emperor, revise first sentence and then remove the piece in second sentence.
Having no heir since the death of Marcellus, Augustus immediately adopted Lucius and his brother from their father by a symbolic sale following Lucius' birth, and named the two boys his heirs. Is there any given reason why Marcus Vipsanius Agrippa was not himself made heir? And any indication as to his response to his sons being made heir instead of him?
In the span of 18 months, the planned future of Rome was shaken. suggest removing planned, might wish to switch to "the succession of Rome" instead.
@SpartaN: That is all my comments, will pass the article now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 02:11, 6 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Made all changes, and will look for Agrippa's thoughts on the adoption of Gaius and Lucius. It is just as likely that we have no idea what Agrippa thought about it. I appreciate the review. SpartaN (talk) 02:22, 6 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]