Talk:Lucas Ocampos/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I will be reviewing this against the GA criteria as part of a GAN sweep. I'll leave some comments soon. JAGUAR  17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

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Checking against the GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   The lead requires an expansion for it to summarise the article. For an article this size I would say that it needs at least a paragraph and not just one sentence, per WP:LEAD

   "Having started only 7 matches by the end of January 2015" - seven (I think in this case it needs to be written out)

   "where he paired up with compatiot Marcelo Bielsa" - I don't know what this means

   Ref 24 is missing an access date

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   No original research found.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

The only thing holding this back is the length of the lead. It needs to be expanded to at least a paragraph (a few more sentences should do it) for it to meet WP:LEADLENGTH. Other than that, it is well written and comprehensive so it should easily pass afterwards. JAGUAR  13:04, 27 November 2016 (UTC)

Edits

Hi Jaguar (talk, thanks for reviewing the article. I have made the following corrections as per your above recommendations.

• The lead has been extended and gives a broad overview of his career so far with key points.
• '7' has been changed to 'seven'
• I have added an access date to ref 24
• 'compatiot' is meant to read 'compatriot' - Bielsa and Ocampos are from the same nation. I have corrected the spelling thereof.

Cheers, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 16:04, 27 November 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for the responses! I've checked through the article again and I'm happy that it meets the criteria now. I thought it might of meant 'compatriot'... JAGUAR  21:22, 27 November 2016 (UTC)