Talk:Love Is a Camera/GA1

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Reviewer: XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk · contribs) 21:10, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

""Love Is a Camera" is a song recorded by British recording artist Sophie Ellis-Bextor. It was written by her in collaboration with singer-songwriter Ed Harcourt for her fifth studio album Wanderlust (2014)."..... could read better, try something like ""Love Is a Camera" is a song by English singer Sophie Ellis-Bextor for her fifth album Wanderlust (2014). Ellis-Bextor wrote the co-wrote the song with its producer Ed Harcourt."
"Influenced by Russian fairytales, the track's lyricism recounts the tale of a woman who takes photographs of her victims and keeps their souls in the pictures"..... how about "Lyrically, the song recounts the story of a woman who takes photographs of her victims and keeps their souls in the pictures"?
"Musically, it has been described as a tango and a baroque-inspired song. A piano, a double bass, and a guitar feature as its instrumentation.".... let's merge this into something like "Musically, the song features pianos, guitars, double bass, and contains tango and baroque".
"Upon release, its lyricism" → "Upon release, its lyrics"
"The former convinces a man who's attracted by her"..... avoid contractions unless part of a title or quote. I think you meant to say this guy is attracted to or towards the "temptress" character.

"As with the entirety of the album, it was co-written by her alongside English musician Ed Harcourt; the latter also controlled its production"..... you don't need to mention that he also co-wrote all the other tracks from the album. Keep it simple: "Ellis-Bextor co-wrote the song with Ed Harcourt. Harcourt produced the track."
"The lyricism of the song was influenced" → "The song's lyrics were influenced"
"The televised serial drama Twin Peaks and its mixture of humour and mystery was also described by her as an inspiration"..... too lengthy, try: "She took inspiration from the humour and mystery from the serial drama Twin Peaks."

Why? Exalted and praised are synonyms; per the FA criterion, prose must be of professional quality. We don't really need to dumb ourselves down for readers.

How about we just keep the focus of Kate Bennett's commentary on this track rather than other ones on the album?

Publisher for The Daily Telegraph is Telegraph Media Group, and should use the newspaper template
Publisher for The Irish Times is Irish Times Trust, and should use the newspaper template
Publisher for The Independent is Independent Print Limited, and should use the newspaper template
Publisher for Time Out (magazine) is Time Out Group Limited, and should use the journal template
Publisher for Attitude (magazine) is Attitude Media, and should use the journal template
Publisher for AllMusic is All Media Network, and something is wrong with the Stephen Thomas Erlewine link
Publisher for Digital Spy is Hearst Corporation
Publisher for The Scotsman is Johnston Press, and should use the newspaper template

Done for AllMusic; check the Digital Spy wiki article. Its publisher is Hearst Magazines UK. The rest, according to this: periodicals should not list its publishers. Did you check the templates that are used in the article? I've used all the correct templates already...

I couldn't notice at first (probably due to absence of publisher), but now I see correct templates are used. Sorry about that. I fixed up Mr. Erlewine's link, though. It just seems empty to have publisher for some refs but not others. The Scotsman is still missing its publisher. If not including the ones I listed above, I'll say go with the editors for each paper (i.e. Ian MacGregor for The Daily Telegraph, Kevin O'Sullivan for The Irish Times). XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 21:48, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It seems pretty unfair having to carry out this change, as it seems a question of your personal preference. I'm just following FAs I've read and the guidelines of Cite Web. Don't get me wrong, it's not laziness or anything, it's just that I'd rather have it like this.

Very well, but remember: if nominating for FA, article will get more intense scrutiny than it would here. I've seen many people nitpick at things like this and thought I could help get it over with ahead of time. Either include publishers for all refs or none for consistency sake. It isn't just personal preference, though, so don't worry. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 22:09, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It's where reliable labels (including Capitol Records) post their press releases and announcements to the media. Seems pretty high-quality to me.

Anything available on background for this particular track? How about critic reviews of the song's music video?

No sources exist besides a Digital Spy link which merely discusses the subject of the video.

Very well, just expand as soon as more info becomes available. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 21:48, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

On hold for seven days. If the above is addressed within that period, I will pass the GAN.

Everything's done except the ones I replied to above. prism^△ 21:34, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]