Talk:Love + Fear (Acoustic)/GA1

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 10:52, 26 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will begin reviewing this later today; I recall reviewing "Orange Trees" and seeing the song's acoustic version written about on the page though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 10:52, 26 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Remove the venue parameter as that is used for live recordings
Rest of the infobox looks good
"The EP was released digitally" → "It was released digitally" with the appropriate target
"It was first announced just weeks prior to its" → "The EP was first announced by Marina less than two weeks prior to"
"serves as the producer." → "serves as the sole producer."
"While deciding on a track listing for the EP," → "While deciding on the track listing,"
"songs from Love + Fear" → "songs from the album" since it is the only album mentioned in this paragraph
"on Jimmy Kimmel Live!" → "on Jimmy Kimmel Live! in 2019"
Add wikilink on music video
"Critical reception towards the EP consisted of positive to mixed reviews. Several critics praised" → "The EP received positive to mixed reviews from music critics, with several of them praising"
"at the EP's selection of songs," → "at the selection of songs by some,"

Background and release

"dropping her "and the Diamonds" moniker in her" → "dropping the "and the Diamonds" moniker from her"
"explaining that" → "explaining that:"
"there wasn’t much" → "there wasn't much"
"her first new single with" → "Marina's first single under" with the target
"she embarked on the" → "Marina embarked on the"
Remove wikilink on England
"a digital extended play featuring" → "a digital extended play that features"
"On the same day," → "That same day,"
"confirmed her news and described" → "confirmed her news, with the release describing"
"published on 13 September," → "published on 13 September 2019,"
"previous studio albums had become popular with her fans," → "previous albums had become popular with fans,"
"of releasing an EP." → "of releasing an acoustic-dedicated EP."
"She also revealed how" → "Marina also revealed how"
"re-recorded for the EP. She said:" → "re-recorded for Love + Fear (Acoustic), saying:"
Target synthetic to Synthetic instrument
"the acoustic versions of the EP's songs" → "the EP's acoustic versions of her songs"
"sent the EP to" → "sent Love + Fear (Acoustic) to"

Promotion

Img looks good
"Following the release of the album" → "Following its release"
"as a musical guest on" → "as a musical guest for"
"where she performed" → "where Marina performed"
"in its music video." → "in the accompanying music video." with the appropriate wikilink
"to promote the EP in addition to Love + Fear" → "to promote Love + Fear (Acoustic) in addition to the album"
"in the United States." → "in the US."
"three music videos for the songs" → "three music videos for the versions of her songs"
"her official YouTube account" → "Marina's YouTube channel during"
"The first one," → "The first visual, accompanying"
"alongside the EP" → "alongside Love + Fear (Acoustic)"
"was for "Karma" and released on 25 September." → "accompanied "Karma" and was released on 25 September 2019."
"dancing and wearing an" → "that dances and wears an"

Critical reception

Remove the ratings box since there is only one review in it
Can't you add more review(s) here so it is backed up properly how the reception was?
"review of the EP, writing that she" → "review of Love + Fear (Acoustic), writing that Marina"
"and described the acoustic version" → "and he described the acoustic version"
"Allison Stubblebine, a writer for" → "Allison Stubblebine, writing for"
"was mxied in her review of the release." → "was somewhat mixed in her review of Love + Fear (Acoustic), giving it three stars out of five."
"as the album's closing track and called it" → "as the closing track of Love + Fear and called the acoustic"
"she said the release was "cluttered" and songs" → "Buchman said it was "cluttered", and songs"
"the originals"; she added:" → "the originals", with her adding:"

Track listing

Retitle to Love + Fear (Acoustic) track listing
Add above the title; Credits adapted from AllMusic, with [12] evoked directly afterwards
Remove targets to Captain Cuts on both Ryan McMahon and Ryan Rabin
[12] should not be evoked in Notes with the new order, while keep All tracks produced by Benjamin Fletcher as the sole note since the other is no longer needed

Release history

See MOS:TABLECAPTION
Distributor → Label
Only one ref should be here; I would suggest only keeping one rather than merging them, since too many retailers may be unnecessary detail

References

Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Copyvio score needs moderate fixing as it is currently at 40.5%; the Billboard ref seems to be behind this
Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead for ref 7
Either keep ref 10 or 11 and add numerous citations for countries to verify the release was various; reword appropriately in prose too, plus if you are going to go with [10] change to Amazon.com in the formatting that changes the Amazon layout depending on the country, or do Apple Music (US) for [11], country layout changing there too.

External links

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold after taking a good look at the article, but be aware I may suggest further changes after you fix the suggestions and never feel afraid to question me if any of the comments confused you! It is good to see EPs being nominated as GAs recently, though. --K. Peake 15:26, 26 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – I believe I addressed all of your comments above. A few things though: I kept the original AllMusic source (#20) because I still used that source to obtain the individual writing credits for the track listing. In regards to the Billboard ref, the only thing appearing in the copyvio detector is the block quote. Also, I could not find anymore formal EP reviews. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Thanks again, Carbrera (talk) 19:20, 28 July 2020 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera Thanks for replying to me properly, I did some copy editing and maybe you could decrease the amount of quoting slightly? Also, is three reviews really enough to verify an overview of reception? --K. Peake 20:14, 28 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – do you have any suggestions as to which quote(s) I should shorten and/or remove? And in regards to your latter point, I believe three is reasonable for a small-scale EP release like this. It was written about by several publications but only reviewed by a few unfortunately. Carbrera (talk) 22:45, 28 July 2020 (UTC).[reply]

I just shortened the block quote used in the article. Carbrera (talk) 02:52, 29 July 2020 (UTC).[reply]

Carbrera No quotes need to be shortened anymore, it's fine right now in terms of copyright and I did some more copy editing very briefly but am now ready to ✓ Pass this! --K. Peake 07:01, 29 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake – thanks again. Also, I'm very pleased to hear you enjoy "Orange Trees". It's not my favorite Marina song but it's a fun one. Carbrera (talk) 11:56, 29 July 2020 (UTC).[reply]