Talk:Love. Angel. Music. Baby. (The Remixes)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 01:55, 28 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and here's my review for your GAN:

Lead

(EP) by → (EP) recorded by
singer-songwriter means she's writing what she's singing all my herself (like Ed Sheeran), which I think she doesn't; change to "recording artist"
2005 by → 2005 through
the album was only → the record was only; you use "album" twice here
It features remixes → It incorporates remixes; you use "features" twice here
try to bring the fact that it was released digitally in the opening sentence and remove the non-charting info, as it is overflous

Background and release

Gwen Stefani's debut → Stefani's debut + unlink her
six singles: "What → six singles—"What
The remix → A remix
and in the → and within the
of Canada → of the record charts in Canada
chart, for → remove comma
You use "remixed" twice here; try to reword
vocals from reggae artist Elán. → the vocal collaboration of reggae artist Elán; this version was also used on a 2005 remix EP for "Hollaback Girl"
was released as a digital download on November 22, 2005 in the United States only by Interscope Records. → was made available for digital download in the United States on November 22, 2005 through Interscope Records, with its sound being inspired——similar like its original counterpart——by dance and electropop music.
Remove last sentence

Track listing

Place the note above, as you did on 'credits and personnel'
Track listing and credits from digital liner notes and AllMusic. → Track listing and credits adapted from the album's liner notes and AllMusic

Credits and personnel

Credits for Love. Angel. Music. Baby. (The Remixes) adapted from its digital liner notes and parent album liner notes. → Credits adapted from the album's liner notes.
Why isn't Gwen Stefani placed atop; her last name begins with "s"

Outcome of GAN review

On hold for 7 days. You've done a good job with the article, apart from some word repetition and few grammar issues. Good luck! Cartoon network freak (talk) 01:55, 28 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Finished. Thank you so much! Carbrera (talk) 16:30, 28 July 2016 (UTC).[reply]

@Carbrera: Passing. Could you take any of my GANs on review? I would appreciate that. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:24, 28 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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