Talk:Lotus (Christina Aguilera album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 10:42, 4 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 10:42, 4 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

Let me open by apologizing that you've had to wait so long for a review. I'll try to get through this one reasonably quickly. On first pass, this looks fairly complete, neutral in most respects, and to use reliable sources. Thanks again for your work on it!

I've done some cleanup for grammar, word choice, and concision as I went, but listed any issues I couldn't immediately resolve below. Let me know your thoughts on these, and once we've resolved them to our mutual satisfaction, I'll do some additional checks. Looking forward to working with you. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:27, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The Voice fellow" -- is this the correct terminology? Does the Voice call its participants "fellows" (as in fellowships)? To put this another way, I'm not clear why "fellow" is being used as a noun here.

Done WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

""Max is legendary in the business. He's known about me but we haven't crossed paths. [...] It's taken us a decade in the same business and watching each other from a distance, so for us to now come together and respect each other's work ethic and how we like to be heard and making a marriage out of it, I think 'Your Body' is the best culmination of that."" -- this quotation doesn't appear to be in the given source.

This excerpt can be found on the second page of the citation provided. WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"labeling it "Fighter 2.0"" -- do you mean she literally labelled the track this? Or are you just using an unusual synonym for "called" or "said"? -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:27, 5 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"It was deemed as one of the best songs on Lotus" -- it would be better to specify which critics deemed it thus. This would also help clarify the grammar. (this should be fixed in the media caption also.)

I took a look for this sentence, but I couldn't find it in the article. WikiRedactor (talk) 22:20, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"and drew comparisons to the cover of her fourth studio album" -- best to just say which critic made this comparison, or that one critic did. But the plural doesn't seem to be accurate here.

Done WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"about being OK with saying you're sorry and the fact that you might have regrets and finding closure and making peace with yourself and the situation" -- this seems like a wordy way of saying something simple-- "about apologies, regrets, closure, and making peace". If the longer version is preserved, commas should at least be added to this long list.

Looks like that bit has already been addressed. WikiRedactor (talk) 22:20, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Best of Me" is a "powerful" ballad" -- this opinion should be attributed in text to comply with WP:NPOV

Looks like that phrase has since been reworded as a power ballad. WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Lyrically, it is a plea to her other half to stop the fighting for the greater good" -- this explanation doesn't make a lot of sense to me-- is half of herself fighting with the other half? Or do you mean a relationship partner? What does "the greater good" mean here?

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 22:20, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"candy-colored" -- what color is candy?

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 22:20, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

" It received general acclaim from critics, who described it as one of Aguilera's best videos." -- the reference doesn't appear to support this. I'd suggest just attributing this opinion to Idolator.com per WP:WEASEL.

Done, WikiRedactor (talk) 22:20, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"The second and final single from Lotus, "Just a Fool", a duet with The Voice fellow and country singer Blake Shelton," -- no need to explain what this track is again in identical language--you described it only five sentences ago

Done WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"English studio-album" -- I assume "English-language" is meant here and not English in the sense of "from/in England"? Probably better to write "English-language".

Done WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hey HD, it's been another week or so, so I just wanted to give you another poke on this one. Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:29, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

If you don't mind, I'll took care of some of the more minor comments, since Simon has been busy with school lately. WikiRedactor (talk) 22:11, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Well it looks like they were all pretty minor, so I went ahead and took care of them all. If you come across any more issues and Simon is unavailable, I am more than happy to offer my assistance.

WikiRedactor (talk) 22:20, 17 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much! I really appreciate your pitching in. I'll take another look through now and see if there's anything left to be done. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:20, 18 October 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Spotchecks show no evidence of copyright issues.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Image and song excerpts are both appropriately tagged.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Pass as GA