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Reviewer: —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 23:43, 9 August 2011 (UTC) Status: Reviewing.[reply]

Comment to reviewer: Don't "claim" a GAN unless you are going to start the review process immediately. This nominator has waited a week for you, but there may have been another reviewer willing to take on the GAN in the interim. Two Hearted River (paddle / fish) 11:24, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will have comments ready soon. I was not aware of such policy. —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 11:27, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It's not a policy, just common courtesy. Two Hearted River (paddle / fish) 11:29, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, I apologize to the nominator and it will be ready ASAP. —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 11:35, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It didn't bother me really. Oz talk 00:24, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I sincerely apologize for the delay, so I prepared the review quickly but thoroughly for your convenience. It is on hold to fix all issues addressed within one week. I am still checking for criterion 2 so it take be a few hours. As the article stands right now, the prose has many issues such as incorrect punctuation, MOS issues and choppy sentences. —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 12:41, 16 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Since issues have been addressed, I feel confident about passing this article. However, be sure to keep expanding the page as info turns up.
Lead
  • ""Look at Me Now" is a song by American recording artist Chris Brown featuring American rappers Busta Rhymes and Lil Wayne." There should be a comma after "featuring".
  • "It was written by Brown, Wesley Pentz (Diplo), Jean Baptiste, Ryan Buendia, Dwayne Carter (Lil Wayne), Trevor Smith (Busta Rhymes) and Nick van de Wall (Afrojack)." You don't have to have their birth names here, keep the lead brief and to the point.
  • "The "Dirty south-inspired" hip-hop song was produced" There should not be a hyphen in "hip hop". Common mistake.
  • ""Look at Me Now" was released as the second single from Brown's fourth studio album F.A.M.E. on February 1, 2011." This should be integrated into the first sentence as it is the main point here.
  • "and noted Busta Rhymes and Lil Wayne's rap verses" As being what? Don't be vague.
  • Internationally, the song also charted in Australia, France, New Zealand, and the United Kingdom." Remove "also".
  • There should be at least one sentence about the reception of the music video in the third paragraph.
  • "their own remix" Should be plural.
  • Actually, I was thinking you merge the first two sentences.  Done Oz talk 22:57, 17 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Background
  • ""Look at Me Now" was written by Chris Brown, Wesley Pentz (Diplo), Jean Baptiste, Ryan Buendia, Dwayne Carter (Lil Wayne), Trevor Smith (Busta Rhymes) and Nick van de Wall (Afrojack).[1][2] It was produced by Diplo and Afrojack and was co-produced by Free School.[2]" Merge into one sentence.
  • ""Look at Me Now" was recorded and mixed" → "The song was recorded and mixed" Don't use the song title too many times.
  • "official release.[5] He said," → "official release, saying,"
  • "Wayne got on it "Look at Me Now" became" Single quotes for "LAMN" because it is inside another quote.
  • The section's running a bit short on information. Can it be expanded? – thats all I could find
  • Link for expansion: [1] —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 00:00, 18 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Composition
  • "rap hip-hop song" No hyphen.
  • "song featuring American" → "song that features American" Don't use Noun+ing.
  • "background mixes is also present" Do you mean are?
  • "Cali Swag District's "Teach Me How to Dougie" (2010)" → "Cali Swag District's 2010 single "Teach Me How to Dougie""
  • "in a yellow Lamborghini, to boot" Don't link inside a quote.
  • "MTV News wrote "Look at Me Now" features" There should be a "that" after "wrote" if that isn't part of the quote.
  • ""a fast-rapping flurry of awesome self-indulgence" Don't link inside a quote.
  • "with an eerie downtempo beat cooked" Same here.
  • "beat he passed along to Diplo" Redundant words.
  • "Have fun.'"" Replace the last apostrophe (not quotation mark) with {{'}}.
Critical reception
  • "the song a positive review; he praised Diplo" → "the song a positive review, praising Diplo"
  • "one of the standout tracks on F.A.M.E" → "one of the standout tracks on the album". Stay consistent.
  • "Ed Easton Jr. from WXRK" I'm sure many people would not know what that is, so briefly describe WXRK in that sentence.
  • ""I can't imagine what would possess Brown to share a track with Lil Wayne and Busta Rhymes. One alone would've been enough to point up just how little personality he exudes on his own tracks, but putting both on "Look at Me Now" ironically renders him invisible."" You have to shorten that quote down a bit, and use single quotes for "Look at Me Now".
  • ""like a second-rate Soulja Boy Tell 'Em"" Paraphrase that quote so you can link to Soulja Boy.
Chart performance
  • ""Look at Me Now" also reached number one" Just say "It reached..."
  • "on the Hot 100 since "Forever" peaked at number two in 2008." → "on the Hot 100 since "Forever", which had peaked at number two in 2008."
  • "for shipments of 35,000 units." Shipments? Change the wording.
  • "In the United Kingdom, "Look at Me Now" debuted" → "In the United Kingdom, the song..."
  • ""Look at Me Now" also charted on the UK R&B Chart" → "It also charted..."
  • You have to talk about how long the song lasted in some of the other charts too. Important information is being omitted.
Music video
  • IMG Caption: "performing intricate routines which were praised by critics" Comma after "routines".
  • "was directed by Colin Tilley" → "was directed by American music video director Colin Tilley" It may be obvious, but it is better not to be too vague.
  • "online the next day. One of" → "online the next day, as one of" Merge short sentence.
  • "One of the images showed Brown" Say Chris Brown's first name.
  • "The video leaked online on March 9, 2011." The fact that it leaked is not notable in this context, unless VEVO was prompted to release the video early, then say so.
  • "he is seen standing next to Busta Rhymes wearing horn-rimmed glasses" Comma after "Rhymes"
  • It might be just me but didn't the video feature some cameos from Cash Money? I might have to look again. If it did, then mention that.
  • Pop Crush? Isn't that a gossip site? – Its similar to Idolator
  • Merge the last two very short sentences.
Live performances
  • "guest appearance at Justin Bieber's concert" → "guest appearance at Canadian recording artist Justin Bieber's concert"
  • "On June 26, 2011, Brown performed the song at the 2011 BET Awards.[44]" Merge this sentence with the next one.
  • No reception from the performances. There had to have been reactions from JB's performance at least. – I'll keep looking
Remixes and cover versions
  • "Justin Bieber performed "Look at Me Now"" JB overlink.
  • "on April 14, 2011.[48] For the performance, Bieber covered" → "on April 14, 2011, covering" Continue in same sentence.
Track listing
  • ""Look at Me Now" (featuring Busta Rhymes & Lil Wayne) – 3:43" → ""Look at Me Now" (featuring Busta Rhymes and Lil Wayne) – 3:43" Small font and replace "&" with "and".
Charts and certifications / Radio and release history
References

Took some time, but here are my comments on the references:

  • Ref [8]: IGN should not be in italics. If it is in the work parameter, you can cancel the italicization by putting by "italicizing" it like this: work=''[[IGN]]''
  • Ref [10]: Same thing
  • Ref [16]: Slant is an online publication, so it is not italicized.
  • Ref [37]: Same thing
  • Refs [56] to [62]; I do not understand the difference between the links. If they are international iTunes sites, put the country in brackets: iTunes Store (Australia). Also, if the site isn't in English, put the language in the language= parameter in the cite template. Example of all of the above:
    • Input:{{cite web|url=http://itunes.apple.com/fr/album/look-at-me-now-feat-lil-wayne/id416262122|title=Look At Me Now (feat. Lil Wayne & Busta Rhymes) – Single|language=French|publisher=iTunes Store (France). Apple Inc.|accessdate=April 13, 2011}}
    • Output"Look At Me Now (feat. Lil Wayne & Busta Rhymes) – Single" (in French). iTunes Store (France). Apple Inc. Retrieved April 13, 2011.

Because all issues (if possible) have been addressed, I feel confident about passing this article. Continue to expand the article with more information as it turns up. —WP:PENGUIN · [ TALK ] 00:29, 18 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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